Diary of my life in Canada　August 26

I cooked Japanese cuisine for my friends.
I think thought it was so-so. I was wondering if the taste was good or not. I was wondering if they liked the taste.
For some foreigners, Japanese cuisine is sweet. We use "みりん" when we cook.
みりん is a kind of Japanese seasoning. It makes the cooking sweet.
Yesterday, I used sugar instead of みりん because there was not wasn't any みりん in the kitchen.
I think I put added too much sugar too much. I shouldn't have put used sugar....

Anyway, My friends ate my cooking anyway well. I'm I was happy for to cook for them.
They ate much a lot, and I ate that as much as them they did.

Nice job Hiromi!  You write well!  I have a few comments:

-We don't really say "so-so" very often in English.  I understand the meaning, but I thought it was ok / I thought it wasn't bad / I thought it was alright might sound more natural to your friends.

-"Anyway" has a slightly different meaning if it's at the beginning or the end of the sentence.  We can use it at the beginning to return to the main story if we change the topic.  Maybe this is what you wanted, and I can understand it.  We can also use it at the end to say "although ~~~, we still ~~~".  So for example, Although I used too much sugar, my friends still ate my cooking can also be written as I used too much sugar.  My friends at my cooking anyway.  In your entry, this one seems better.

-よく食べた We don't talk about eating or drinking like this.  It's much more common to say something like  My friends ate a lot of my cooking or maybe My friends really seemed to like my cooking. 

Please message me if you have any other questions!  Great work!

A Two Million Dollar Dust Particle

There is an astronomic laboratory located in Texas and belonging to the NASA dedicated to the study of meteoritics, to figure out what they meteorites are made of. In order to collect physical samples, the research program, which is run by NASA scientific, utilizes sophisticated laboratories on earth, a complex university collaboration network and, which is more amazingly, a special aircraft to detect traces of meteorites on the outside in space. This plane is an old spy vehicle refitted with specialized equipment. It works like a fishing net or a strainer, loooking for really small dust particles. At best, it only collects two or three ones. This, in fact, is considered as a huge success by the researchers. The total cost of the program is over 3 or 4 million dollars in round. So, you can find that Each particle, therefore, costs almost a million dollars. Is it worth spending such an astonishing amount of money? It is, in my opinion, because this research will provide us with very useful information in the long run, as well as new technologies based on it. Besides, all the human beings should be grateful that the United States does it.

Great job!  I made most of my changes to unify the tone of the essay.  You switch between a casual and formal style, so many suggestions are different word choices to make the writing more cohesive.  This was a very interesting essay.  If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask!

Childhood!

Childhood is a special time. When we were children, we could believe in Santa Claus or in fluffy unicorns or in fairies. And But how strong was our disappointment when we knew learned that Santa Claus it is only fiction?
But at all people was go through childhood differently ways. Somebody Some people didn't have parents. Who was Some stopped believing in their dreams, but somebody became stronger.
Each of us has have its our own history of childhood that shapes our life.

Nice job Olya!  When we talk about one person, we can say "somebody".  When we talk about many people, we can say "some people" or "some boys" or just "some".  If you have any questions, please ask!

Sentences with "with" at the end of a phrase

Hello! I'm trying to make sentences using "with" at the end. Could you help me, please?

- I don't have anybody to speak Japanese with.
- I have a friend to speak English with.
- I still don't know with whom I'll sit at the party.
- You are the only friend I can speak about these things with.
- I have to find somebody to travel with.
- He doesn't know with whom he's talking.

I also tried to make sentences with objects, but I think they look a little weird. Do people say things like this? Because in Spanish is normal, but I don't know how it is in English.

- This is the poem I won the contest with.
- That is the wood I'm going to make a table with.
- This is the pen I always write letters with.
- That is the book I learned to read with.

Than you! (:

Most of these are fine.  I don't know if you can separate the phrase "with whom" grammatically, but it nevertheless sounds unnatural to my American ears. All the other sentences look and sound natural.  Nice job! 

"Since the advent of technology and after the ubiquitous Due to the global spread of many modern technological applications, a plethora of people from all walks in of life as well as activities has been have changed their ways of thinking.Ubiquitous doesn't really work here, because it and "spread" have conflicting meanings.  If something is already everywhere, it can't really spread.  However, due to the spread of technology, devices such as cellphones and computers have become ubiquitous in many parts of the world.  Also, "plethora" and "from all walks of life" have a similar function in this sentence, so I recommend using only one.  "From all walks of life" provides the nuance of a variety of people in addition to the amount of people.

In parallel, Additionally, most of many old-fashioned devices have been on the way out and many people have been shying away from abandoning their usage.Here, "in parallel" conflicts with the focus of your essay, because new and old technologies are moving in different directions from one another and are therefore, I would argue, not parallel.  The development of smartphones and public Wi-Fi may have developed in parallel, for example.  In parallel implies that not only do they move in the same general direction, but that they are connected to each other in some way.

"Shying away from" has the connotation that people are avoiding <devices> due to negative emotions associated with those devices, for example stress regarding safety, privacy or health concerns.  One might expect people shying away from a device to prefer having nothing over having to use the worrisome object.  In the context of your essay, people will likely be choosing newer technology as a replacement to the older, so I would suggest a different phrase.

However, it seems axiomatic true that technology has brought pernicious drawbacks and has taken its a toll on our society.Axiomatic implies complete certainty, and conflicts with the verb "seems".  Additionally, this word is not typically used in an "A is B" grammatical structure.  For example, Tim Cook has recently been speaking axiomatically about the necessity of the information privacy of Apple's customers.

For instance, many unsubstantiated ideas might go viral quickly spread without any trial for critical analysis.I'd suggest an example, since "going viral" is such a very specific way for an idea or content to spread.  The  new words you used seem to me like a clash of writing styles ("unsubstantiated" feeling more academic or formal, and "go viral" feeling more modern and casual), so an example to emphasize and clarify your statement will help make the sentence more cohesive.

It all boils down to the fact that many technological applications such as computers have been unexpectedly considered off the beaten track, and hence, after a long fight they have win out.I'd argue that computers were a natural consequence of the industrial revolution, and therefore not off the beaten track, but actually one of the formers of the track.  Electric cars, for example, challenged the traditional concept of a fossil fuel-burning combustion engine, and a case could be made that this was a development from off the beaten track.

Nice job, Michael!  Apologies for writing so much.  I love talking semantics and nuance, so feel free to write me with any questions you have.

the disadvantage of eating more food from other regions

People can eat a wide variety of food in other regions. As a result, it makes people eat more food from other regions than the local region. (talk about the disadvantage first)

From my point of view, there are two primary disadvantages of eating more food from different parts of the world.

The first one is that First, it people might expend spend more money than before they would otherwise if they enjoyed this kind of pleasant lifestyle.

Due to the development of public transport, it is has become more efficient and convenient for travelers to go somewhere anywhere they desire to.

Therefore, those who develop this habit tend to spend more of the amount of money and time, which even has might have a negative effect on their work and life if someone are addicted to the activity this activity developed into an addiction.

In addition Second, this activity plays a detrimental role in the improvement of is detrimental to the domestic food industry.

Provided that a considerable number of people are prompted to travel to eat outside their local place areas, there would be little advice or fewer suggestions offered by residents to related restaurants and this is not helpful for these restaurants to make progress. I'm  not sure of the point of the last sentence.  Maybe something like "If people leave their local areas to eat, the demand for local cuisine may decrease, which would negatively impact local restaurants."  ??

Drawlu nice job.  You have some pretty good ideas in here.  If you add more detail to each of your arguments, I think you'll have a very strong essay.

The Olympics in Rio

Do you watch The Olympics in Rio?
TheseThis is a question that you can hear these days.
The Olimpics are present the provide a stage on which athletes come from all parts of the world to represent their countries and show their sport's skills compete in various sports.
The An Olympic medal is very valuable.
To earn it one, an athlete needs to prepare himself intensively. His life needs subordinate to the sport which he engage in.  The sport he engages in must dominate his life.
That This means every day daily training and special nutrition. In short, a A lot of discipline and self denial is required.
An athlete needs to time his form/condition (?) for be in top condition on the day of competition. He needs to show the best he knows.
If he makes a mistake, his chance for a correction redemption is in four years.
The life of an athlete can be a motivation for motivate all us to do big things in our lives.

Red: spelling corrections

Yellow: word or phrase substitutions

Nice job Gabrijel!  I made a few bigger changes to reflect how I might say this in American English.  If you have any questions about why I changed anything, please send me a message!