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From 6 min English BBC I have just learnt some words from BBC 6-min English. They are >> UBIQUITOUS, GO VIRAL, PERNICIOUS, OFF THE BEATEN TRACK, UNSUBSTANTIATED, ON THE WAY OUT, SHYING AWAY FROM, WIN OUT and IN PARALLEL. I will use them in useful sentences in this paragraph. "Since the advent of technology and after the ubiquitous spread of many modern technological applications, a plethora of people from all walks in life as well as activities has been changed their ways of thinking. In parallel, most of old-fashioned devices have been on the way out and many people have been shying away from their usage. However, it seems axiomatic that technology has brought pernicious drawbacks and has taken its toll on our society. For instance, many unsubstantiated ideas might go viral without any trial for critical analysis. It all boils down to the fact that many technological applications such as computers have been unexpectedly considered off the beaten track, and hence, after a long fight they have win out.

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"Since the advent of technology and after the ubiquitous Due to the global spread of many modern technological applications, a plethora of people from all walks in of life as well as activities has been have changed their ways of thinking.Ubiquitous doesn't really work here, because it and "spread" have conflicting meanings.  If something is already everywhere, it can't really spread.  However, due to the spread of technology, devices such as cellphones and computers have become ubiquitous in many parts of the world.  Also, "plethora" and "from all walks of life" have a similar function in this sentence, so I recommend using only one.  "From all walks of life" provides the nuance of a variety of people in addition to the amount of people.

In parallel, Additionally, most of many old-fashioned devices have been on the way out and many people have been shying away from abandoning their usage.Here, "in parallel" conflicts with the focus of your essay, because new and old technologies are moving in different directions from one another and are therefore, I would argue, not parallel.  The development of smartphones and public Wi-Fi may have developed in parallel, for example.  In parallel implies that not only do they move in the same general direction, but that they are connected to each other in some way.

"Shying away from" has the connotation that people are avoiding <devices> due to negative emotions associated with those devices, for example stress regarding safety, privacy or health concerns.  One might expect people shying away from a device to prefer having nothing over having to use the worrisome object.  In the context of your essay, people will likely be choosing newer technology as a replacement to the older, so I would suggest a different phrase.

However, it seems axiomatic true that technology has brought pernicious drawbacks and has taken its a toll on our society.Axiomatic implies complete certainty, and conflicts with the verb "seems".  Additionally, this word is not typically used in an "A is B" grammatical structure.  For example, Tim Cook has recently been speaking axiomatically about the necessity of the information privacy of Apple's customers.

For instance, many unsubstantiated ideas might go viral quickly spread without any trial for critical analysis.I'd suggest an example, since "going viral" is such a very specific way for an idea or content to spread.  The  new words you used seem to me like a clash of writing styles ("unsubstantiated" feeling more academic or formal, and "go viral" feeling more modern and casual), so an example to emphasize and clarify your statement will help make the sentence more cohesive.

It all boils down to the fact that many technological applications such as computers have been unexpectedly considered off the beaten track, and hence, after a long fight they have win out.I'd argue that computers were a natural consequence of the industrial revolution, and therefore not off the beaten track, but actually one of the formers of the track.  Electric cars, for example, challenged the traditional concept of a fossil fuel-burning combustion engine, and a case could be made that this was a development from off the beaten track.

Nice job, Michael!  Apologies for writing so much.  I love talking semantics and nuance, so feel free to write me with any questions you have.

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From 6 min English BBC

I have just learnt some words from BBC 6-min English.
They are >> UBIQUITOUS, GO VIRAL, PERNICIOUS, OFF THE BEATEN TRACK, UNSUBSTANTIATED, ON THE WAY OUT, SHYING AWAY FROM, WIN OUT and IN PARALLEL.
I will use them in useful sentences in this paragraph.
"Since the advent of technology and after the ubiquitous spread of many modern technological applications, a plethora of people from all walks in life as well as activities have changed their ways of thinking. In parallel, most of old-fashioned devices have been on the way out and many people have been shying away from their usage. However, it seems axiomatic that technology has brought pernicious drawbacks and has taken its toll on our society. For instance, many unsubstantiated ideas might go viral without any trial for critical analysis.
It all boils down to the fact that many technological applications such as computers have been unexpectedly considered off the beaten track, and hence, after a long fight they have won out.


notes: That was great.  I graduated high school in USA and I didn't know some of those words.  You used all of them correctly [emoji]

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