the disadvantage of eating more food from other regions
People can eat a wide variety of food in other regions. As a result, it makes people eat more food from other regions than the local region. (talk about the disadvantage first)
From my point of view, there are two primary disadvantages of eating more food from different parts of the world. The first one is that it might expend more money than before if people enjoy this kind of pleasant lifestyle. Due to the development of public transport, it is efficient and convenient for travelers to go somewhere they desire to. Therefore, those who develop this habit tend to spend more of the amount of money and time, which even has a negative effect on their work and life if someone are addicted to the activity. In addition, this activity plays a detrimental role in the improvement of domestic food industry. Provided that a considerable number of people are prompted to travel to eat outside the local place, there would be little advice or fewer suggestions offered by residents to related restaurants and this is not helpful for these restaurants to make progress.
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the disadvantage of eating more food from other regions
People can eat a wide variety of food in other regions. As a result, it makes people eat more food from other regions than the local region. (talk about the disadvantage first)
From my point of view, there are two primary disadvantages of eating more food from different parts of the world.
The first one is that First, it people might expend spend more money than before they would otherwise if they enjoyed this kind of pleasant lifestyle.
Due to the development of public transport, it is has become more efficient and convenient for travelers to go somewhere anywhere they desire to.
Therefore, those who develop this habit tend to spend more of the amount of money and time, which even has might have a negative effect on their work and life if someone are addicted to the activity this activity developed into an addiction.
In addition Second, this activity plays a detrimental role in the improvement of is detrimental to the domestic food industry.
Provided that a considerable number of people are prompted to travel to eat outside their local place areas, there would be little advice or fewer suggestions offered by residents to related restaurants and this is not helpful for these restaurants to make progress. I'm not sure of the point of the last sentence. Maybe something like "If people leave their local areas to eat, the demand for local cuisine may decrease, which would negatively impact local restaurants." ??
Drawlu nice job. You have some pretty good ideas in here. If you add more detail to each of your arguments, I think you'll have a very strong essay.
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