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I agree with Paul's corrections, with the following additions:
The Area of Libya: Facts and Figures.
First of all, I'd like to tell you where libya is located, because this might be the first time you've heard of this country.
In fact, I've met people who have no clue about Libya and where it is situated. When I answer them, I always try to simplify my description. I tell them that Libya is the west neighbour of Egypt. This is probably the easiest way because almost everyone knows exactly where Egypt is.
Libya is located on the north of Africa, along the Mediterranean Sea. The Libyan coastline is about 1770 km long. It has the second longest coastline between all the countries on the Mediterranean. The Sahara desert which is the largest desert in the world also covers a large area of Libya.
After this brief introduction, I want to mention few interesting facts about the area of Libya:
1- The total area of Libya is about 1,759,540 square kilometers.
2- It is the fourth largest country in the African continent after Algeria, the Democratic Republic of Congo and Sudan.
3- Libya occupies the 17th place in the list of the 20 largest countries in the world. or "Libya is the 17th largest country in the world.
4- Comparing with the continent of Europe, Libya's area is about one-fifth of the area of Europe.
5- Libya represents a 1.2% of the surface area of the Earth.
6- The outlines of libya can fit the outlines of Germany, Mexico, Switzerland, parts of Italy, France and the south of the U.S.I think you are trying to say that the area (square miles or square km) of Libya is comparable to the other countries listed. The most common way of saying this (US) is "Libya is comparable in size to Germany, Mexico....., etc.
Finally, the facts illustrated above show how large the size of Libya is and I hope you'll find all these information useful.Very well written!
The true Size of Africa: Photo credit: Kai Krause0 votedNovember 8, 20165- Una Caminata en los Andes Durante la semana de vacaciones, mi hijo y su familia (su esposa y dos hijas) decidieron hacer una caminata de tres días en el camino Inca. Ellos solían ir en caminatas en los Estados Unidos, pero este viaje fue diferente. Fueron de senderismo a 4600 metros de altitud. Era lluvioso y frío. Las chicas comenzaron a mostrar los primeros signos del mal de altura, y todos se sintían miserables. Finalmente alcanzaron la cima de la senda y comenzaron a caminar hacia abajo rápidamente. Pronto eran más cálidas y en una elevación más baja. Cuando hablé a las chicas por teléfono después de que regresaban a Loja, sólo se rieron y dijeron que “era una aventura".November 8, 201661
A Different Week
This week was different in Ecuador.From Wednesday to today it was holliday. - 5 rest-daysdays of rest! [nothing wrong here, but "rest days" isn't common in US English. We would probably say "five days off"]
Many people traveled to the beach [break sentence here using period or semi-colon. If using a period, capitalize T on "this"], this is the favourite [US spelling is "favorite"] place for people in on vacations. "to be on vacation" (estar de vacaciones) or "to go on vacation" (ir de vacaciones) are common US English phrases I'm going on vacation next week. He was on vacation when had the accident. Let's go on vacation together. When people are on vacation, they don't worry about what's happening back home.
But people who have traveled in other holidays have always the same problem., When it's time to come back home, there are so many people traveling at the same time on the road, that it causes too much traffic, and the travel time is unsopportable intolerable [or any of John's alternative phrases].
Therefore I prefer to stay in my city and to rest.
On Friday I visited my family and we make made a delicious breakfast.,Later we ate oranges just taken of fresh from the tree.It was a good day.
Tomorrow things will back to normal, if it can be called normal, because the Christmas atmosphere is begins to notice season has begun [or has arrived] We often refer to "the Christmas spirit" when referring to the atmosphere that surrounds the whole holiday season. You might add a sentence to add just a few details about what the "Christmas atmosphere" is like in Ecuador."Run-on sentences" are only a grammatical error in written English. In speaking, you would naturally pause at the right places, so of course punctuation wouldn't matter. :-)
0 votedNovember 8, 20161- A I can skate! 1 watch me! B Please be careful ! GOOD A I can climb that tree. B Please don’t 3 hang that! PLEASE DON'T HANG LIKE THAT! (hanging from a branch, perhaps) A It’s OK. Aagh! 4 help ! A 5 let’s go! B No, 6 don’t on! 7 wait for us! NO, DON'T GO YET; WAIT FOR US. A Please 8 stop play this game in the garden! 9 do it now! PLEASE STOP PLAYING GAMES IN THE GARDEN! DO IT RIGHT NOW! (We might say, "Please stop playing games in the garden right now"....but you need to use the word "do", right? :) B OK, but don’t shout !0 votedNovember 7, 20160
A Ray of Hope
On the verge of giving up,
I heard that healing voice,
telling me to pursue my dream
and to never regret regretting my choice. [or "never to regret...".]Nice!
Only suggestion is to use "parallel construction" by starting each of the two phrases with the same verb form ("to pursue" and "to...regret").
0 votedNovember 6, 20165SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION QUESTIONS
I'm applying for a fine arts scholarship!, but I don't know if my statement is too informal, . Do you have any suggestions?
CARREER PLAN QUESTION
My main goal is to be a professional illustrator and artist, .* In my free time at university, I practiced and practiced to create my own style and tried to grow and build a career in my country.,* “Petunia” is my nickname,. I started on in 2013, and I think all the effort that I put on into this life project, is beginning to give yield some results, . * but aAlthough I think I’m in on a good path to reach my goals, I feel that I need to develop new abilities in order to be an expertise in the illustration and art field.
I want to expand my boundaries, try new techniques, and meet new artists and illustrators, . * I want to return to Guatemala, and mix integrate different cultures, ideas, feelings, and experiences into my art,. * I want to share my knowledge with my colleagues my knowledge, . I want the Guatemalan artist community to grow, and I want to open new possibilities for the next generations find to make the illustration and art career as into a real profession where in which they can make for a living. [I'm not sure if I preserved your meaning in the last sentence.]* These are all examples of what we call "run-on sentences" in English. Very long sentences need to be broken into shorter sentences, each sentence ending with a period and beginning with a capital letter.
You did a great job writing this. You expressed your ideas clearly. In my opinion it is not too informal at all. It has just the right style and tone for an application essay. Nice work!
0 votedNovember 6, 20160A story of high school
When I was in high school I used to like maths *, but when I was in the last year ["a senior" or "in my last year"] I had problems with my maths teacher. **, wWe discuss argued***, and since then after that, I stopped going to his classes.
One day, a friend said to me "I understand you, .The classes are boring for you, Therefore wherefore, I would like help you to learn maths in a more entertaining way, IF if you will help me with my computing homeworks. That way it will be easier for you to approve maths improve in math and for me to approve improve in computing ". approve = aprobar improve = mejorar
He was a businessman.
I thought it was a fair deal. , aAfter all, I like computing and he was good at teaching.
Thanks to him, I finished high school and my math teacher never knew how I learned without going to class.GREAT STORY!
* "mathematics"sounds like a plural noun because it ends in "s"; however it is a singular noun (a single subject in school". When we shorten it to a more informal word, we say "math".
** It's good to break a very long sentence into two shorter ones, so that a composition teacher doesn't call it a "run-on sentence" ; -)
*** I think this is what you mean, but I'm not sure. "To discuss" means to have a calm talk about something; "to argue" [or "have an argument"] means to discuss something with emotion, usually anger
0 votedNovember 6, 20162MyMe, Myself and I [all major words in a title are capitalized]
Hello. My name is Alejandro, and I am 22 years old. I'm from the north of Spain, a region [or town] called Asturias. I really like to listen to [or listening to] music, the Eurovision Song Contest, cinema watching movies, and learning languages.* I study Social Integration to help people who are in social exclusion marginalized and excluded from society because the of drugs, use, inmmigration, bullyng, or other issues... I would like to work helping all these people.
I live in Oviedo with my boyfriend Miguel. He is from Córdoba, on in the south of southern Spain, but now we live together in Oviedo. He studies Spanish at the Uuniversity** and works like particular as a special education teacher with children with special needs.*** He really loves his work. We started our relationship at 25th December 25, on 2012 [or Christmas Day, 2012]. I love him so much,; he is my prince.
We live in a flat with one girl from France, two girls from China and one girl from Mallorca. We only have a good relationship with Andrea, the girl from Mallorca, because the others are very strange.* this is just a stylistic suggestion; there is greater parallel construction when all verbs are in the same tense: listening, watching, learning
** shouldn't be capitalized unless you use the actual name of the university
*** I'm just guessing at what you meant by "particular". If he works with children with physical, emotional, or behavioral disabilities, we now refer to them as "special needs children" or "children with special needs"'. Their education classrooms or programs are referred to as "special education" or more informally as "special ed". If I misunderstood your meaning, just forget what I said. :- )
Nice writing!
0 votedNovember 6, 20160Can you check this please?
I would like to help you to learn fun ways to use the computer computing in a more entertaining way , If you will help me with my math homeworks.
That way it will be easier for you to approve computing improve your computer skills and for me to approve improve in math, which is boring for me. (that seems boring to me)All the suggested corrections are good. Sometimes it's helpful to think about different ways to say the same thing. It helps you understand how flexible a language is. : -)
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