SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION QUESTIONS I'm applying for a fine arts scholarship! but I dont know if my statement is to informal, do you have any suggestions? CARRER PLAN QUESTION My main goal is to be a

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SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION QUESTIONS I'm applying for a fine arts scholarship! but I dont know if my statement is to informal, do you have any suggestions? CARRER PLAN QUESTION My main goal is to be a professional illustrator and artist, in my free time at university, I practiced and practiced to create my own style and tried to grow and build a career in my country, “Petunia” is my nickname, I started on 2013, and I think all the effort that I put on this life project, is beginning to give some results, but although I think I’m in a good path to reach my goals, I feel that I need to develop new abilities to be an expertise in the illustration and art field. I want to expand my boundaries, try new techniques, meet new artists and illustrators, I want to return to Guatemala, and mix different cultures, ideas, feelings, experiences in my art, I want to share with my colleagues my knowledge, I want the Guatemalan artist community to grow, and open new posibilities for the next generations find the illustration and art career as a real profession where they can make for a living.

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SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION QUESTIONS

I'm applying for a fine arts scholarship!, but I don't know if my statement is too informal, . Do you have any suggestions?

CARREER PLAN QUESTION

My main goal is to be a professional illustrator and artist, .* In my free time at university, I practiced and practiced to create my own style and tried to grow and build a career in my country.,* “Petunia” is my nickname,. I started on in 2013, and I think all the effort that I put on into this life project, is beginning to give yield some results, . * but aAlthough I think I’m in on a good path to reach my goals, I feel that I need to develop new abilities in order to be an expertise in the illustration and art field.

I want to expand my boundaries, try new techniques, and meet new artists and illustrators, . * I want to return to Guatemala, and mix integrate different cultures, ideas, feelings, and experiences into my art,. * I want to share my knowledge with my colleagues my knowledge, . I want the Guatemalan artist community to grow, and I want to open new possibilities for the next generations find to make the illustration and art career as into a real profession where in which they can make for a living. [I'm not sure if I preserved your meaning in the last sentence.]

* These are all examples of what we call "run-on sentences" in English. Very long sentences need to be broken into shorter sentences, each sentence ending with a period and beginning with a capital letter.

You did a great job writing this. You expressed your ideas clearly. In my opinion it is not too informal at all. It has just the right style and tone for an application essay. Nice work!

SCHOLARSHIP APPLICATION QUESTIONS

I'm applying for a fine arts scholarship! but I don't know if my statement is too informal. Do you have any suggestions?

CARER PLAN QUESTION

My ambition is to be a professional illustrator and artist. In my free time at university, I practiced and practiced to create my own style and tried to grow and build a career in my country, “Petunia” is my nom de plume. I started in 2013, and I think all the effort that I put in this life project is beginning to show results, but although I think I’m on the right path to reach my goals, I feel that I need to develop new abilities to be an expert in the illustration and art field.

I want to expand my boundaries, try new techniques, meet new artists and illustrators. I want to return to Guatemala, and mix different cultures, ideas, feelings, experiences in my art. I want to share with my colleagues my knowledge. I want the Guatemalan artistic community to grow, and open up new possibilities for the next generations to find illustration and art as a real profession where they can make for a living.

Very well written! You're hired (not fired)!

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