我第一次到香港嘅時候 ， 我就覺得香港啲住宅單位又細又貴 ，通常啲單位都係用鐵閘既門。其實我覺得咁樣好奇怪。雖然每一層樓有一個保安員,但係仲就好似香港人覺得個城市唔安全。(但係香港人好似仲／仲係覺得個城市唔安全, with 'still', in cantonese, '仲' which is an adverb in this sentence, it's more common to put the adverb after the subject "香港人". Just like in English, e.g. I still like him=>我仲鐘意佢 or, many people are still using iphone5=>好多人仲用緊iphone5) 撳鐘之後就要等人趟開鐵閘先，跟住先可以入屋。個人意見，個感覺好似住喺監獄咁。廚房同客廳都好細，花灑喉管平時喺廁所入面，但係廁所好細。沖涼之後乜都潮啦 ，廁所板都好濕 ，唔方便大解。

我嘅意思 : The first time I was in Hong Kong, I thought the apartments in Hong Kong are both small as well as expensive. Most of the apartments have a iron gate. Actually, I think this is very strange. Even though each building has a guard, it seems people still feel unsafe in this city. After ringing the door bell, you first need to wait for someone to open the iron gate, after that you can go in. In my personal opinion, it feels like a prison. The Kitchens and living rooms are all small. Showers are usually inside the toilets, but the toilets are very small. After taking a shower, everything is wet. The toilet seat would also be wet. That is not very convenient when taking a dump/pooping.

我女朋友上個星期喺度。我覺得我屋企嘅睡房太細囉，首先我冇雙人床，跟住佢嘅嘢擺滿晒我間房。佢嚟探我嘅時候，我就要攞兩個床褥，跟住擺佢哋喺側近喺地板(with the correction above which is correct, 我就要攞兩個床褥並排放／擺喺地下，擺&放 have similar meaning, which can both mean 'put')。我女朋友覺得我嘅枕頭唔舒服，所以我哋去咗市中心買一個新枕頭畀佢。好似佢鍾意新嘅。<=I understand what you mean, but I think it would be easier to understand if change to 佢好似鍾意新(嘅)嗰個

My girlfriend was here last week. I think my house is too small. First of all, I do not have a double bed, and her things fill my whole room. When she visits me, I have to take two mattresses and then put them next to each other on the floor. My girlfriend thinks my pillow is not very comfortable, so we went to the city center to buy a new pillow for her. It seems she likes the new one.

探父母過生日

你好! 好高興又同你見面。 我好耐冇練廣東話。 我上次上堂之後就冇點練過廣東話。
唔好意思. 我上個星期好忙. 時間表排到滿晒， 上個星期喺大學要上好多堂，好多功課要做, 仲有好多報告/project要寫添. 除咗呢啲之外，我每日都會/要教荷蘭文幾個鐘.咁你知我有几忙啦。呢嗰個 週末我都係喺 我Daddy、Mommy屋企，我去探佢哋，琴日係我Daddy生日，我同我大佬一齊去同佢慶祝生日，一家人呀嘛,我哋食咗生日蛋糕，Mommy仲煮咗/好多嘢食/九大簋，我Daddy今年55歲，我希望我父母都長命百歲，所以我就可以日日見到佢哋，我真係好锡我Daddy、Mommy ~ga (㗎)。琴晚，我哋10點鐘先返到屋企，我哥哥喳車喳 (in this case I suggest using 揸車 instead of 喳車. As we use hands to drive referring to the term 'driving a car', generally, in Chinese word formation we use the radical of 手/扌 to form the character which relates to hands, like 打人, 捉住, 推開, etc. So although '喳‘ and '揸' has the same pronunciation and poeple can understand what you say, I just wanna explain more so it helps you to think about the relation between the radicals and word meanings :D ) 咗兩個半鐘，我坐車坐咗兩個半鐘，佢哋住係喺 北部，我住係喺 南部，因為唔係好方便，所以我哋一個月先見一次。呢個星期三我女朋友將會嚟荷蘭探我，佢會係度留一個星期，我好想快啲見到佢，我想日日同佢練習廣東話，好啦，我要走啦，多謝你啊，拜拜!

Notes: Even Hongkongeses always mix up the use of these similar characters, like 嗰(go2) & 個(go3); 喺(hai2) & 係(hai6), but still they have different tones. Maybe you already known it and this is just a reminder :)

Your Cantonese is very very good,  and enjoy the time with your girlfriend!

大家好！早晨

早晨! 我现在依家 要去做嘢喇。今日喺 係 星期一，我觉得唔喺係 几想返工啊。
得闲可以找搵 我倾下计！

'喺' is mean '在' in Chinese written language. When you are saying is or is not you should use '係'or 唔係:)

星期六晚

昨晚琴晚／尋晩 我同朋友去咗食飯。我好遲返咗返到 屋企所以現在依家 我真係幾攰。

When you talk about 'yesterday' or 'last night', you use 琴(Kam4)日 ／尋(tsam4)日 or 琴晚／尋晩,

'昨'晚 is the written languge in Chinese :)