我女朋友上個星期喺度。我覺得我屋企嘅睡房太細囉，首先我冇雙人床，跟住佢嘅嘢擺滿晒我間房。佢嚟探我嘅時候，我就要攞兩個(床褥嘅量詞應該係張)床褥，跟住擺佢哋喺側近喺地板(或者可以講並排放喺地下 -> put them next to each other on the floor)。我女朋友覺得我嘅枕頭唔舒服，所以我哋去咗市中心買一個新枕頭畀佢。好似佢鍾意新嘅。 

我第一次到香港嘅時候 ， 我就覺得香港啲住宅單位又細又貴 ，通常啲單位都係用鐵閘既門。其實我覺得咁樣好奇怪。雖然每一層樓有一個保安員,但係仲就好似香港人覺得個城市唔安全。(但係香港人好似仲／仲係覺得個城市唔安全, with 'still', in cantonese, '仲' which is an adverb in this sentence, it's more common to put the adverb after the subject "香港人". Just like in English, e.g. I still like him=>我仲鐘意佢 or, many people are still using iphone5=>好多人仲用緊iphone5) 撳鐘之後就要等人趟開鐵閘先，跟住先可以入屋。個人意見，個感覺好似住喺監獄咁。廚房同客廳都好細，花灑喉管平時喺廁所入面，但係廁所好細。沖涼之後乜都潮啦 ，廁所板都好濕 ，唔方便大解。

我嘅意思 : The first time I was in Hong Kong, I thought the apartments in Hong Kong are both small as well as expensive. Most of the apartments have a iron gate. Actually, I think this is very strange. Even though each building has a guard, it seems people still feel unsafe in this city. After ringing the door bell, you first need to wait for someone to open the iron gate, after that you can go in. In my personal opinion, it feels like a prison. The Kitchens and living rooms are all small. Showers are usually inside the toilets, but the toilets are very small. After taking a shower, everything is wet. The toilet seat would also be wet. That is not very convenient when taking a dump/pooping.

我女朋友上個星期喺度。我覺得我屋企嘅睡房太細囉，首先我冇雙人床，跟住佢嘅嘢擺滿晒我間房。佢嚟探我嘅時候，我就要攞兩個床褥，跟住擺佢哋喺側近喺地板(with the correction above which is correct, 我就要攞兩個床褥並排放／擺喺地下，擺&放 have similar meaning, which can both mean 'put')。我女朋友覺得我嘅枕頭唔舒服，所以我哋去咗市中心買一個新枕頭畀佢。好似佢鍾意新嘅。<=I understand what you mean, but I think it would be easier to understand if change to 佢好似鍾意新(嘅)嗰個

My girlfriend was here last week. I think my house is too small. First of all, I do not have a double bed, and her things fill my whole room. When she visits me, I have to take two mattresses and then put them next to each other on the floor. My girlfriend thinks my pillow is not very comfortable, so we went to the city center to buy a new pillow for her. It seems she likes the new one.