About my dog

First of all, I realized than there are only two posts available in one day 😭

I have a dog. She is toy-terrier and her name is Mika. She is<s> a</s> very small and tiny. When I wished (I had) a dog, I hope(d), tha<s>n</s>(t) she would be <s>mannerly</s> (well-behaved), ans now she is 👍But<s> also</s> this can (only) be <s>possible only</s> achieved ("possible" is fine, but achived sounds better with "with") with hard work. This breed is very <s>emotional</s> (sensitve - gets sad easily; easily frightened - gets scared easily), she <s>is trembling from the noize</s> (trembles when she hears loud noises like when) food, paper and garbage <s>on</s> (hit) the floor 🤣 Also she barks <s>to the </s>(at) stranger(s) on the street, and it<s>'s</s> make(s) me (a)shame(d) 🤦‍♀️But I (will) always love her <s>so</s> (very - "so" doesn't collocate with "always" here) much.

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If you're willing to trade lessons, we could strike a deal. I'm not native, though. If you wish, I could send you my italki video (which is still under analysis).

writing task 1. Cambridge 14. describing a map

These two maps illustrate how a park site <s>which </s>has developed since 1920. Overall, the park has been modernized as extensive developments with regards to new construction of recreational facilities for adults and children <s>has</s>have been built. All (of its) <s>the </s>original parts <s>except</s> but for a rose garden, <s>has </s>were demolished and new decoration change(s) have also played a part in improving the <s>park</s> layout of the park significantly.

In 1920, a fountain was located in the center of the park which was (later) replace(d) with a large rose garden(.) <s>which </s>This garden is surrounded <s>with </s> by four seating area(s). <s>In</s>(on) the left side (there used to be) a stage for music performances (which) was demolished in order to <s>construction </s>allow room for a large and modern amphitheater. <s>Moreover</s> (Another noticeable change) concerns a <s>pond </s>(are you sure this is the word you mean? isn't it fountain?) and another rose garden which have been turned into a playground area for children and a café <s>In</s>(on) the top right hand corner. <s>in the opposite side,</s> a Glasshouse (do you mean greenhouse?) next to (the) southern entrance has been replaced with a water feature (fountain? water feature sounds too vague. Besides, repeating water fountain wouldn't be good.). Furthermore, in order to (grant) access (to) underground parking lots, the seats (all of them, or some? you have to specify the type of seat oyou're talking about) have been eliminated.

<s>In </s>(on) the top left hand corner, (nothing) has changed, considerably. <s>just </s>The only thing that is worth mentioning is the change made in the <s>two</s> seating area(s) (that used to be) around (the) rose garden, which has been removed(,) <s>while </s>(whereas) on the bottom the rose garden and seating area have been removed to have enough space for amphitheater. - this sentence sounds like a frag

Hey, this composition was fine! I think you can do better, but this is definetely the way. What is the test you are aiming for? Now, I'll write some notes on what could have been better.

A razão <s>por que</s> (pela qual) estudo línguas estrangeiras

Meu <s>nomi</s>(nome) e(é) Dennis, eu tenho trinta e oito anos. Tenho dois irmãos, uma menina e um menino. Eu aderi <s>a</s>(ao) iTalki porque quero aprender outros idiomas. Agora estou estudando português e espanhol. Às vezes ainda pratico inglês mas (na OU a) maioria das vezes pratico português e espanhol.

Quando eu estava na faculdade estudei programação informática básica. Também trabalhei em uma empresa de jornais por mais de quatro anos, trabalhei lá como representante de atendimento ao cliente mas eu demiti-me três anos atrás. Eu decidi demitir-<s>se </s>(me) por causa de estresse e pressão demais. Meu o trabalho lá foi muito difícil porque eu fui atribuído para trabalhar no departamento de assistência ao cliente o que é o departamento mais difícil da empresa. Eu sempre lidava com clientes irados <s>e</s> (,além de - isso deixa o seu texto mais sofisticado!) sempre <s>recebia </s>(receber muitas reclamações sobre <s>mau serviço</s> (serviços ruins) como entrega tardia, jornal incompleto, <s>alguns </s>(algumas, pois páginas é substantivo feminino) páginas (que) estavam <s>em falta</s> (faltando), ou <s>os </s>jornais (que) não <s>estiveram </s>(vinham sendo) sendo entregue(s) regularmente. Às vezes eu também lidava com os faturamentos dos clientes, por exemplo, se os clientes não <s>podem </s>(pudessem) arcar (com) o novo preço de sua assinatura, <s>tentamos</s> (tentávamos) oferecê-los uma assinatura mais acessível para que ainda <s>podem</s> (pudessem - depois de que e se vc precisa usar o modo subjuntivo em alguns casos) continuar a sua assinatura. Eu trabalhava nove horas por dia, de segunda-feira a sexta-feira. Mas depois de trabalhar por mais de quatro anos finalmente decidi demitir-<s>se </s> (me) porque não <s>posso </s> (podia) mais lidar com o estresse e a pressão em meu trabalho. Esse trabalho foi muito difícil porque realmente testou <s>meu </s>(minha) paciência. Meu cunhado e (eu) tentamos começar um negócio novo, foi uma cantina, mas apenas durou (até o) oitavo meses (mês) porque não ganhamos dinhe(i)ro suficiente para continuá-l<s>o</s> (la - porque vc está falando da cantina). Agora minha única fonte de rendimento <s>é </s>(são os) apartamentos de <s>aluguer </s>(aluguel,mas ficou confuso. eles são seus ou você trabalha com imóveis [agente imobiliário]) mas não é (o) suficiente para pagar minhas outras contas. Talvez eu <s>vou</s> (vá) tentar trabalhar em uma empresa de Business Process Outsourcing, mas exigem que todos seus empregados falem inglês muito bem. Tem também empresas de Business Process Outsourcing que estão procurando pessoas quem também possam falar outras línguas estrangeiras e oferecem um salário mais alto. Esta é a razão principal<s> por que</s> (pela qual - mais adequado) estudo

o espanhol e o português.

No geral, ficou bem legal! Continue assim, em breve você estará falando português!

Essay Baikal

Last winter I traveled to the most amazing place I have ever been-Lake Baikal.

Baikal is the largest lake in Siberian Russia.There is fresh water and it's cold even in summer.

(the) Lake (or, if you don't want to use "the", say the name of the lake again) freezes in winter,so you can walk on ice,skate,drive by car and even build the (a - since it is not a specific house) house on the lake.You can't see ("find" instead of "see"might be more appropriate here!) this crystal clear ice anywhere.

The place is developed (suitable instead of developed? maybe, perfect?) for tourism. There are many hostels, cafes (and) open-air markets on the coast, where you can relax and enjoy fresh air.

Unfortunately, there is very windy (there is a lot of wind OR it is very windy), so you have to wear more (cut "more" out) warm clothes.

Generally (overall? Generally sounds like "in a general way" and I think you mean "in all ways" - if you mean to keep it, say "Generally speaking"), it is (a) very beautiful and wonderful place, which (where, because you're talking about the place, right?) you will get a large charge (dose OR boost may sound better) of forces and energy.

Necessarily (I'm not sure if this is wrong, but it surely sounds weird! how about "Finally" or "In my opinion"?), you have to be (visit - instead of be) here (Baikal)!