Email (B2 exam)

Hi everyone! please let me know if you see any grammar errors or incorrect forms of writing.

Hi Lena,

Thanks for your invitation. I’m very happy we can meet next weekend.

I was thinking that we <s>can</s> could going out to dinner and eat Japan<s>a</s>ese food. I have heard there are many sushi<s>’s </s>re<s>a</s>staurants in your neighbourhood, isn’t true [I would say: is that true?]?

In general, I like to eat various types of cooking, it could be a good way to experiment with new tastes <s>of</s> from different parts of the world.

Sushi is definitely my favourite kind of food. I usually eat sushi once a week.

Other than that, I like <s>very much</s> to eat P<s>p</s>ersian food very much. I’m <s>appasionate</s> passionate about oriental [you might want to use Asian here instead of oriental] culture.

I was wondering <s>that </s>if you could choose between sushi or P<s>p</s>ersian food for <s>our</s> dinner. Let me know!

Afterwards, I would like to go into a cocktail bar that’s not too noisy where we could talk to each other about <s>our </s>stuff undisturbed.

Meanwhile, how are things? How is it going with your yoga class?

It’s kind of you to invite me to stay with you next weekend.

See you soon!

Giulia

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Writing exercise

Hi, I'm Rita and I'm 30. I'm a geologist [I don't know your position well enough to comment with confidence on this note, but to me saying "geological researcher" or "research geologist' sounds better] researcher and my principal focus is about <s>on trigger landslides</s> [landside triggers] by rainfall events. I love my job and usually I spend <s>much more </s>a lot of time to doing numerical simulations and el<s>e</s><s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">a</s>borations of the obtained results. These can give me important information<s>s</s> about when landslides may occur.

Usually, I work from Monday to <s>until </s>Friday, while on <s>at </s>the weekend I rest [alternative: relax] with my husband and we do <s>have</s> a lot of activities <s>togheter </s>together. For example, we go<s>ing </s>to the movies once a <s>cinema even one time every </s>month, go<s>ing</s> to the city park to jog <s>do jogging</s>, or we cook new dishes [alternative: recipes]. Sometimes, the results aren't very good, but the time can be very fun<s>ny</s> [alternative: we have a fun time].

Generally, we <s>have a lot of</s> travel a lot, for work or holiday [alternative: vacation] and we take many [alternative: a lot of] photos that we hang on all the walls of our house.

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Why Rome is called the "Eternal City"!?

Different cities had been called "eternal city" <s>during the</s> throughout history, but Rome <s>was</s> is the only one that has kept this name for years. This is because of Albio Tibullo <s>credit</s>. He was a latin poet who few people know, but <s>in the past</s> he was famous for his erotic poems. <s>On</s> In the second book of "Elegie", he imagined a remote period and wrote "Romulus Aeternae nondum formaverat Urbis moenia" that we can translate as "Romolo didn't build the wall of the eternal city". This is the first known <s>and more ancient</s> reference to the eternal city <s>until now</s>.

<s>Someone thinks</s> People think that the author of this epithet is the Imperator Adrian, but it's not true.

he imagined a remote period = I'm not sure what you mean here

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Printed materials <s>in</s> for learning

Nowadays, <s>being</s> with electronic devices part of everyone's daily life, issues concerning the use of online reading material<s>s</s> for childre<s>a</s>n are increasingly rising [alternative: on the rise]. Despite the fact that some people believe that online reading material<s>s</s>** should be used for teaching a child how to read, in my opinion this is not <s>be the </s> <s>better </s>ch<s>i</s>oice [alternative: the best choice]

<em>** Throughout your essay you write: reading materials and printed materials (plural). I think singular sounds better, so I've x'd out the "s" throughout. That said, I don't think your'e grammatically wrong making these references plural. I think it's just a matter of personal preference.</em>

Firstly, spending too much time on electronic devices badly effects the health of a child. As a matter of fact, the small <s>dimension of the letters</s> font on tablets may damage their eyesight. Moreover, the light of the device not only <s>does </s>can cause headaches frequently, but it can also make a child hyperactive and consequently give them trouble falling asleep.

Furthermore, losing concentration is much easier <s>on</s> when using an electronic device than it is <s>on</s> when using printed materials. Tablets, smartphones, and computers are often considered merely as a game by children** and not associated with the idea of learning and studying.

<em>**</em><em>Tablets, smartphones, and computers are often considered merely as a game by children.</em><em> Here you are equating tablets/smartphones/computers with games. Which would mean game should be plural, I think. But, I'm not sure that's what you want to say. The devices are games? Or using the devices is like playing a game? It's a tricky sentence.</em>

In addiction to it,[<--I don't think this is necessary] Nowadays people are surrounded by technology and they should allow themselves a break. Children, for instance, <s>during most part of the day </s>watch tv most of the day, play videog<s>r</s>ames, or play on their <s>own</s> tablets; reading <s>on</s> printed material<s>s</s> may give them a break from technology, as well as their parents.

On the other hand, people often suggest that reading on electronic devices reduces the use of paper and it is therefore better for the environment. However, [<--I don't think this is necessary.] It seems to me that electronic devices may damage the environment even more than books as they are not recyclable materials.

<s>As a</s> In conclusion, the advantages of using printed material<s>s</s> are significant: they are <s>more healthy </s>healthier, help children keep<s>ing</s> concentration, and give them the opportunity to <s>have</s> take a break from technology. However, it is true that the environmental sustainability of printed material<s>s</s> s<s>c</s>hould be improved and it is high time books were made only from recyclable paper.

(P.S I'm trying to improve my ability in writing essays. I would really appreciate if you can help me sound more natural and English as possibile).

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Exercise - Write a letter with a descriptive piece -

Dear Maria,

How are you? I'm very well. <s>Last year in</s> A year ago this week I was in Paris with my family. It was my third time in Paris.

The first time I visited Paris was 35 years ago. I was at the high school and it was a wonderful trip with my classmates. We visited beautiful squares, parks, streets and museums but my best memory was the Montparnasse Tower. We got to the terrace in the evening. It was dark and a cold wind was freezing us, but there was a big, light [alternative: bright] full moon and it seemed possible to extend a<s>n</s> hand and touch it. The view of the city was amazing. We could recognize streets and buildings we had seen the [alternative: you could (but don't have to) eliminate "the"] days before.

<s>The </s>last year during the trip in Paris with my family, I decided to show the Montparnasse Tower to my children. It <s>has been</s> was still beautiful,<s> too </s>but there were barriers around the terrace and the view of the city was a little different <s>for</s> because of that.

Bye

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Hi,

I didn't highlight the words added, but tried to offer suggestions that might clarify what you're trying to say here. Good effort! The past perfect vs. simple past is something you'll get more comfortable with over time.

Help to translate

My name is Alessandro and I'm a computer science expert. <s>n expert in computer science</s>.I have worked as a<s> it </s>customer support specialist for 11 years.

I have given <s>gave</s> assistance <s>about</s> with HP products such as laptops, desktop workstations, and printers. My job has consisted of analyzing customer<s> issue</s> problems, <s>and eventually perform a</s> troubleshooting, and then finding <s>the customer to the</s> solutions. At times I would <s>and when need</s> control<s> the </s>equipment<s> in</s> remotely and solve the issue directly.

When I understand the problem is hw and not sw I can manage the substitution of the component organizing the pickup and delivery to the laboratory or technician visit to repair the component in place

As a final step of the process, I <s>use to</s> do a callback to the customer some days after to make sure the issue <s>is</s> has been completely solved.

My primary customers <s>Main customer I </s>have been <s>supporting </s>Fiat, Sky, and Nestle.

please correct this and <s>told</s> let me know if it's better to use simple past o present perfect.<s> if </s>I ended this job 2 years ago and now i want to change jobs again to return to being a customer support specialist.

Hi Giuseppe,

In blue are just suggestions.

Good job! I was able to clearly understand what you were talking about even with the few grammatical errors.

Cheers.

How can you prepare a perfect coffee?

In this period [Alternative: These days] <s>the</s> cafes are closed and we have to wait <s>that</s> until they will open [you could add here: "again"] after the quarantine, but we can't give up coffee.

You may notice that the flavor of <s>the</s> coffee is different in every café! That<s>'s</s> happens because [you could also say "That's because..."] every barman has his [you could use "their" here instead of "his" to be non gender specific] secret: the temperature of the water, the preparation time, the different type of the mixture... [Alternative: ingredients...]

There Doesn't exist <s>a</s> only [Alternative: "There isn't just"] one way to prepare a coffee<s>?</s> But Maybe <s>it does </s>there is!

A team of researchers has created a mathematical model to find the formula<s>tion of</s> for the perfect coffee or an easy recipe to get one fairly good, <s>observing the operation of the</s> using a coffee machine, where the water is carried at high-pressure by a pump, after it is heated to 90 degrees and at the end it is pushed out through the coffee powder [Alternative: grounds] that <s>it</s> is [Alternative: if you use "grounds" then the "is" would change to "are"] pressed in the filter.