Printed materials in learing
Nowadays, being electronic devices part of everyone's daily life, issues concerning the use of online reading materials for childrean are increasingly rising. Despite the fact that some people believe that online reading materials should be used for teaching a child how to read, in my opinion this is not be better chioice.
Firstly, spending too much time on eletronic devices badly effects the health of a child. As a matter of fact, the small dimension of the letters on tablets may damage the eyesight. Moreover, the light of the device not only does cause headaches frequently but it can also make a child hyperactive and consequently give them trouble falling asleep.
Furthermore, losing concentration is much easier on an electronic device than it is on printed materials. Tablets, smartphones, computers are often considered merely as a game by children and not associated with the idea of learing and studying.
In addiction to it, nowadays people are surronded by technology and they should allow themselves a break. Children, for istance, during most part of the day watch tv, play videogrames or play on their own tablets; reading on printed materials may give them a break from technology, as well as their parents.
On the other hand, people often suggest that reading on electronic devices reduces the use of paper and it is therefore better for the environment. However, it seems to me that electronic devices may damage the environment even more than books as they are not recyclable materials.
As a conclusion, the advantages of using printed materials are significant: they are more healthy, help children keeping concentration and give them the opportunity to have a break from technology. However, it is true that the environmental sustainability of printed materials schould be improved and it is high time books were made only from recyclable paper.
(P.S I'm trying to improve my ability in writing essays. I would really appriciate if you can help me sound more natural and English as possibile).
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Printed materials in learning
Nowadays, being with electronic devices being part of everyone's daily life, issues concerning the use of online reading materials for children are increasingly rising. Despite the fact that some people believe that online reading materials should be used for teaching a child to teach children how to read, in my opinion this is not be better a good chioice.
Firstly, spending too much time on electronic devices badly affects children's health the health of a child. As a matter of fact, the small dimension size of the letters letter size on tablets may damage the eyesight. Moreover, the light of the device not only does causes headaches frequently but it can also make a child children hyperactive and consequently give them trouble falling asleep.
Furthermore, losing concentration is much easier on an electronic device than it is on printed materials. Tablets, smartphones and computers are often considered merely as merely a game by children and not associated with the idea of learning and studying.
In addiction to it addition to this, nowadays people are surronded by technology and they should allow themselves a break. Children, for instance, during the majority of the day watch TV, play videogames or play on their own tablets; reading on with printed materials may give them a break from technology, as well as their parents.
On the other hand, people often suggest that reading on electronic devices reduces the use of paper and it is therefore better for the environment. However, it seems to me that electronic devices may damage the environment even more than books as they are not recyclable materials.
(P.S I'm trying to improve my ability in writing essays. I would really appriciate if you can help me sound more natural and English as possibile).
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Printed materials in for learning
Nowadays, being with electronic devices part of everyone's daily life, issues concerning the use of online reading materials for childrean are increasingly rising [alternative: on the rise]. Despite the fact that some people believe that online reading materials** should be used for teaching a child how to read, in my opinion this is not be the better chioice [alternative: the best choice]
** Throughout your essay you write: reading materials and printed materials (plural). I think singular sounds better, so I've x'd out the "s" throughout. That said, I don't think your'e grammatically wrong making these references plural. I think it's just a matter of personal preference.
Firstly, spending too much time on electronic devices badly effects the health of a child. As a matter of fact, the small dimension of the letters font on tablets may damage their eyesight. Moreover, the light of the device not only does can cause headaches frequently, but it can also make a child hyperactive and consequently give them trouble falling asleep.
Furthermore, losing concentration is much easier on when using an electronic device than it is on when using printed materials. Tablets, smartphones, and computers are often considered merely as a game by children** and not associated with the idea of learning and studying.
**Tablets, smartphones, and computers are often considered merely as a game by children. Here you are equating tablets/smartphones/computers with games. Which would mean game should be plural, I think. But, I'm not sure that's what you want to say. The devices are games? Or using the devices is like playing a game? It's a tricky sentence.
In addiction to it,[<--I don't think this is necessary] Nowadays people are surrounded by technology and they should allow themselves a break. Children, for instance, during most part of the day watch tv most of the day, play videogrames, or play on their own tablets; reading on printed materials may give them a break from technology, as well as their parents.
On the other hand, people often suggest that reading on electronic devices reduces the use of paper and it is therefore better for the environment. However, [<--I don't think this is necessary.] It seems to me that electronic devices may damage the environment even more than books as they are not recyclable materials.
(P.S I'm trying to improve my ability in writing essays. I would really appreciate if you can help me sound more natural and English as possibile).
Good job!
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