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Hi, I'm Rita and I'm 30. I'm a geologist researcher and my principal focus is about on trigger landslides by rainfall events. I love my job and usually I spend much more time to do numerical simulations and eleborations of the obtained results. These can give me important informations about when landslides may occur.
Usually, I work from Monday until Friday, while at the weekend I rest with my husband and we have a lot of activities togheter. For example, we going to the cinema even one time every month, going to the city park to do jogging, or we cook new dishes. Sometimes, results aren't very good, but the time can be very funny.
Generally, we have a lot of travel, for work or holiday and we take many photos that we hang on all the wall of our house.
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Hi, I'm Rita and I'm 30. I'm a geologist researcher and my principal focus is about on trigger landslides by (or "due to") rainfall events. I love my job and usually I spend much more time to do doing numerical simulations and elaborations of the obtained results. These can give me important information about when landslides may occur.
Usually, I work from Monday until Friday, while at the weekend I rest with my husband and we have a lot of activities together. For example, we go going to the cinema even one time every once a month, go going to the city park to jog do jogging, or we cook new dishes. Sometimes, results aren't very good, but the time can be very fun funny.
Generally, we have a lot of travel, for work or holiday and we take many photos that we hang on all the walls of our house.
Really great, Rita, you did an outstanding job!
You did very well using the present tense.
Just a couple of comments: 1) "Information" is uncountable, so you would say "important information". "Types of information" is countable. 2) You may mean "fun" in "the time can be fun", vs. "funny". Then again, if the results of your or your husband's cooking are hilarious, the time can also be funny!
I think you're going to write many more thoughtful and interesting entries. I look forward to reading them. Please feel free to ask for my help! I study Italian daily.
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Hi, I'm Rita and I'm 30. I'm a geologist [I don't know your position well enough to comment with confidence on this note, but to me saying "geological researcher" or "research geologist' sounds better] researcher and my principal focus is about on trigger landslides [landside triggers] by rainfall events. I love my job and usually I spend much more a lot of time to doing numerical simulations and eleaborations of the obtained results. These can give me important informations about when landslides may occur.
Usually, I work from Monday to until Friday, while on at the weekend I rest [alternative: relax] with my husband and we do have a lot of activities togheter together. For example, we going to the movies once a cinema even one time every month, going to the city park to jog do jogging, or we cook new dishes [alternative: recipes]. Sometimes, the results aren't very good, but the time can be very funny [alternative: we have a fun time].
Generally, we have a lot of travel a lot, for work or holiday [alternative: vacation] and we take many [alternative: a lot of] photos that we hang on all the walls of our house.
Good job!
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