What's your favourite TV program? Actually, I rarely watch TV, but if I have the opportunity/ if I get the chance I'll watch a program called "Head and Tails". The program has the following rules: two <s style="color: red;">leading  </s> people/ hosts go to an unknown country, and then flip <s style="color: red;">the</s> a coin. <s style="color: red;">A</s> The more fortunate person gets to <s style="color: red;">should </s>visit the country with a gold card with an unlimited budget, and the <s style="color: red;">an</s>other has <s style="color: red;">should have</s> only $ 100. I am so interested in seeing other countries, their sights and cultural features. I also like the idea that it is often not necessary to have a lot of money to enjoy a journey.

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Yours is really good :) - I've just added in a few suggestions in blue.

In our current time/Nowadays it is hard trying to hide the remarkable influence that we get from television. Therefore it is usual to find numerous programs to choose from and these include 24 hour<s style="color: red;">s</s> sport channels. This could be seen as a <s style="color: red;">focus</s> source of distraction due to sitting and relaxing <s style="color: red;">in </s>watching a football match on TV for some people may be uncomfortable while others would enjoy this as well. It is no doubt true that now it is easier to find any sport program on TV than it was before as television companies are offering a wide range of sports lately in their plans/ TV packages.

The question is, are we becoming lazier as a result of being exposed to a non-stop broadcasting of sports? From one perspective, it could be true, that these programs are making young people lazy. However, this is not only based on whether young people / the young watch sports or not, but also the time they are spending doing such activities. Some people who like sports find them enjoyable and, as a consequence, they spend <s style="color: red;">quite</s> so much time watching sports on screens that there is not enough spare time to participate themselves.

By contrast, watching sport may makes adolescents more keen on taking <s style="color: red;">up </s>it up. Moreover, either the desire or the motivation to become as successful in their professional sport careers as an elite player, has made some young people interested in playing sports. Thus, I would suggest that these are positive aspects of watching sports programs.

In my opinion, the main point of discussion should be the <s style="color: red;">fact </s> reasons behind why we like sport. Does an individual like sport merely as a spectator or as a participant? If the reason is literally the pleasure of watching other people playing soccer, volleyball or even dancing, that person will never want to be among those who take part. However, if the person enjoys being active and keeping fit, then sports programs will never <s style="color: red;">avoid </s>prevent/stop this.

What you've written is really good :) I've just added in some words (in blue) / suggestions (in yellow) to make it sound a bit more idiomatic

I was so touched by a speech which was given by a <s style="color: red;">fourth-stage-cancer</s> woman with stage 4 cancer. I also watched a movie last night called Five Feet Apart. Both of them <s style="color: red;">just told</s> showed me how even just being healthy is already a blessing for us, so we should be grateful for everything we <s style="color: red;">are</s> have right now. We should cherish every moment that we have the ability and freedom to do whatever we want to do and value the time that we spend with our <s style="color: red;">be</s>loved ones. Each second that we waste might be something that someone would do anything to get back later on <s style="color: red;">suffers so much to try to earn it back from death</s>. We should make maximum use of our time (make the most of our time-sounds more idiomatic but nothing wrong grammatically with what you’ve put) and go all out to live a wonderful life.

-Yes, I sewed at school in special classes - I sewed a toy dog and an apron. <s style="color: red;">Also </s>I should have also sewn a skirt (I had also planned to sew a skirt- sounds more idiomatic), but something went wrong... I didn't finish it. I always admire the ability of others to sew, I think it is amazing that they <s style="color: red;">to </s>make things with their own hands- these clothes <s style="color: red;">is</s> are unique and extraordinary. When I was going on a maternity leave, my husband even bought me a sewing machine, and I naively imagined that I<s style="color: red;">'ll</s> would have a lot of free time <s style="color: red;">to</s> for creating clothes/to create clothes. But I sewed only one thing - before the child<s style="color: red;">'s</s> was born – (which was) a special cocoon for newborns. I think I did pretty well/ it was a pretty good piece of work, and I enjoyed the process, but since then I haven't sewed, so my sewing machine is just sitting in my closet

Yours was really good :). I've just added in a few words in blue/ changed the sentence order to make it flow a bit better. The parts in yellow highlighter are additional options/ explanations.

1.   I will graduate in 3 months. <s style="color: red;">E</s> I really don’t want to leave this place. Maybe in a few years I will back here to continue my PhD <s style="color: red;">in few years</s>. But right now I’m not <s style="color: red;">don’t have a</s> planning to apply for <s style="color: red;">it </s> one (because it’s actually<s style="color: red;"> it’s</s> really hard for me. My Masters was already hard for me hhh.) <s style="color: red;">I’m </s>Recently I’m/ I’ve been trying to look for a job.

2.   This weekend I went to see a movie named ‘My Best Summer’ with my two friends. This movie tells a story about (or: tells the story of) two senior students who knew each other just by <s style="color: red;">their</s> name<s style="color: red;">s</s> <s style="color: red;">to</s> and who then became deskmates, and then eventually fell in love (with each other- not necessary but not wrong). This love story started sweet- although <s style="color: red;">without</s> it wasn’t a smooth process (although it wasn’t all plain sailing- sounds more idiomatic)- but anyway it had a happy ending.

 

Game of Thrones is one of the most intriguing yet amazing TV shows <s style="color: red;">watched in history</s> ever created. Ever since I <s style="color: red;">have watched</s> started watching it I haven't been able to get into another show in the same way I <s style="color: red;">had been attaches to </s>have with this one. Known by the way the multiple story lines and characters intertwine with one another, Game of Thrones is absolutely genius. John Snow, one of the main characters, is introduced as one of the most <s style="color: red;">epic</s> important ones and you cannot help but fall in love with him and his loyalty. The cinematography and CGI is stunning and you are going to feel completely immersed in Westeros- wishing you could just jump in and be part of the story at times. Also, it is characterised by its many twists and turns and things you would never expect <s style="color: red;">watch</s> to see. Nonetheless, Game of Thrones is incredible and definitely worth your time! However, be warned that once you start you won't be able to stop and TV will never be the same for you.