Some thoughts after watching a Ted video #Please help me correct, thanks.
I was so touched by a speech which was given by a fourth-stage-cancer woman. I also watched a movie last night called Five Feet Apart. Both of them just told me even just being healthy is already a blessing for us, so be grateful for everything we are having now.
Cherish every moment that we have the ability and freedom to do whatever we want to do. Value the time that we spend with our beloved ones.
Each second that we waste might be something that someone suffers so much to try to earn it back from death.
Make maximum use of our time and go all out to live a wonderful life.
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What you've written is really good :) I've just added in some words (in blue) / suggestions (in yellow) to make it sound a bit more idiomatic
I was so touched by a speech which was given by a fourth-stage-cancer woman with stage 4 cancer. I also watched a movie last night called Five Feet Apart. Both of them just told showed me how even just being healthy is already a blessing for us, so we should be grateful for everything we are have right now. We should cherish every moment that we have the ability and freedom to do whatever we want to do and value the time that we spend with our beloved ones. Each second that we waste might be something that someone would do anything to get back later on suffers so much to try to earn it back from death. We should make maximum use of our time (make the most of our time-sounds more idiomatic but nothing wrong grammatically with what you’ve put) and go all out to live a wonderful life.
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