1.你有什么爱好? 全世界有很多种爱好。有人喜欢运动,有人喜欢音乐,有人喜欢看书。

this sentence is correct but you can change some words of it like“全世界有很多种爱好”-“世界上有很多种不同的爱好。”，we Chinese usually say like this.

2.爱好让人休思。我认为,如果你作什么事的时候,你感觉幸福 和满意,这是你的天赋。

I can't understand what “休思”mean，but i think you maybe mean “relaxed”，so i think you can say “爱好让人身心放松。”and “天赋”means“gift”，so I think you don't express your meaning correctly.,maybe you can say“我认为，如果你做什么事的时候，你觉得幸福且满足，那就是你的爱好。”

3.从小时我有多不同的爱好。比如,那时侯我对跳舞感兴趣。我能终日跳舞。除了跳舞,我还喜欢画画。可是现在我不喜欢跳舞,也不喜欢画。

when we say “when i was young ”in chinese,we usually say“小时候”，and “我终日跳舞”mean “you keep dancing all day”，you can say “我每天都跳舞”,it means “i danced everyday”，by the way, you can use some conjunctions like “既....，又.....”it means “and”，so you can say“可是现在我既不喜欢跳舞，又不喜欢画画。”

4.现在学习汉语是我最大的爱好。差不多每天都我做练习,写汉字,读课文,听听力。 还我对音乐感兴趣。我喜欢弹吉他、也喜欢唱歌。有时候我自己作曲音乐。

you can't use“还”like that, you should put it behind “我”，you can say“我还对音乐感兴趣。”or “并且我也还音乐感兴趣。”you can't use “音乐”behind “作曲”， because “作曲”means “create music”

5.所以,如果我有周末,我度过时候看书,学汉语,弹吉他。但是,很可惜现在我没时侯休思,因为我准备考大学,这是我最重要的目的。

apparently you made some mistakes in this sentence especially at the beginning.you can say like this“所以，如果到了周末，我会看书、学汉语、弹吉他。但是，很可惜我现在没有时间放松，因为我准备考大学，这是我现在最重要的目标。”

although you made some mistakes ,your article is good,and keep practicing ,you'll make great progress .and hope you can get high marks in your college entrance examination .by the way if you still have something you don't understand ,you can ask me

1.今天我说中文了和喜欢。

I think you wanna say that you speak Chinese today and you like it.but there's a mistake in your sentence.you can correct it like this:“今天我用中文与人交谈了，我很喜欢中文。”

2.我跟一位中国女人说话了。她很好。

ummmmm,this sentence is correct

3.我们做朋友现在因为中文！

but this sentence isn't correct,the order of some words isn't correct ,you can say “我们因为中文而成为了朋友。”

Chinese is a very beautiful language and hope you can make progress in it,and if you still have some questions ,you can ask me

1.我的冰箱里一定有蔬菜果汁和弹和香肠。

you mean there are some vegetables ,juice,eggs and sausage in your fridge ?but we Chinese don't use“一定”like what you did.when others ask:what's in your fridge ,maybe we'll say like what you did,but i think in this article,you can just say“我的冰箱里有一些蔬菜与一瓶果汁，还有一些鸡蛋和香肠。”

2.这些是我每天早上吃的。

you mean These are the things what I eat in the morning? I think you can just say “我每天早上都吃这些东西。”but I think what you say is correct and sometimes we say like that.

3.虽然我有时候想吃面包，但几乎每天我吃米饭，蛋和香肠，和蔬菜果汁！

maybe you can pay more attention to the conjunction ,and the order of some words isn't correct.you can say like this:“我的主食几乎每天都是米饭，配上鸡蛋、香肠、蔬菜与果汁，但有的时候我想把面包当主食。”

maybe I misunderstand some sentences of yours,and sometimes we don't say like what i wrote ,i just correct what you said ,so if you have some questions ,you can ask me.

Keep practicing ,you'll be better

1.我想给你们介绍一下我的家。我家有四口人：爸爸，妈妈，哥哥和我。

this sentence is correct but we Chinese's“家” usually means home,so maybe you can say “介绍一下我的家人”

2.但是现在哥哥有自己的家，所以他不和我们住在一起。

ummmmm,i think this sentence is correct

3.所有的人有不同的性格。每个人互有有点和缺点。

you wanna say “all my family has different characters ,and they have both advantages and disadvantages”so you can say“我的家人性格都不同，有缺点也有优点。”

4.我父母的关系很温柔的。因为小的时候我爸爸妈妈是邻居，所以他们一生都互相认识。

you can't use“温柔”to describe “关系”，and “一生”means whole life，so you can say“因为我父母以前是邻居，他们从小就认识，所以他们的关系很好。”

5.2月26号我父母过了三十五周年的结婚纪念日。我以他们很为荣。我问：“ 幸福夫妻的关系有什么秘密？”我爸爸回答：“这里没有秘密，但是爱和幽默是成功的保证！”

We Chinese usually don't say like what you did,maybe you can chane some words.“2月26号，我父母过了三十五周年结婚纪念日，我以他们为荣。我问：“夫妻幸福的秘密是什么？”我爸爸回答：“没有什么秘密，但要记住，爱和幽默是夫妻幸福的保证。””

6.我爸爸是军人。虽然他对工作人员很严格也很厉害，但是对家人他很软，有礼貌也很很精神。我父亲不但很聪明，而且很诚实。即使有困难的事情他能吃苦也能支持家人。

you can describe your father like this“我爸爸是军人。他虽然对同事及下属很严格，但对家人很温柔。他彬彬有礼，并且精神很好。他很聪明，也很诚实。当家人遇到困难，他都会不辞劳苦地帮助家人。”

you can't use“软”to describe “to family”maybe you wanna say“kind to your family ”，and in the last sentence you made a big mistake ,you should correct it

7.我妈妈是对我的理想。她肯定很慈善。她还能接受我们的缺点也教我们有耐心。我母亲常常说：“首先需要看见人的优点，其次人的缺点。”

you can describe your mother like this“成为像我妈妈一样的人是我的理想。她很慈祥，对我们的缺点很包容，并且对我们很有耐心。她常常说：“首先应该看见别人的优点，其次才是别人的缺点。”in the first sentence you made a big mistake ,i think you wanna say that you wanna be a person like your mother.

8.我自己觉得很幸福，因为我长在互相间的爱情。我很认真也很负责。我是个特别精神的人。你热爱生活越多，就会变得越幸运！

Ummmmm,apparently you made some mistakes .“因为我成长在和睦的家庭环境中，所以我觉得自己很幸福。我很认真也很负责，而且是一个富有活力的人。我觉得，越热爱生活的人越幸运。”

Although you made some mistakes,you write a good article.keep practicing ,you'll make great progress .

1.我父母在大学的时候认识了，几个月以后结婚了。

I think you wanna say that your parents met each other for the first time in college ,and after a few months they got married ,so maybe you can say this sentence like this“我父母在大学的时候相互认识，几个月之后就结婚了。”

2.我妈妈是一个矮的又聪明又害羞的女人，我爸爸是一个高的又帅又幽默的男人。

In china,when we describe a person, we can use some conjunction like “但是”，“并且”，so you can say this sentence like this“我妈妈是一个聪明又幽默，但是有一点儿矮的女人；我爸爸是一个又高又帅，并且很幽默的男人。”

3.他们都一点儿也不一样。妈妈很努力却爸爸挺马虎。

you should change the order of some words like “他们一点儿都不一样”,but i don't know how long you have learnt Chinese,so i 'm not sure if you have learnt “反义词”or not,so maybe your teacher can tell you “努力”和“马虎” aren't “反义词”。

4.父母共同的生活非常快乐，他们已经二十六年结婚了。

the order of some words isn't correct.you can say like this“我的父母已经结婚二十六年了，他们的生活非常快乐。”

5.其实他们的爱情很浪漫，跟电影的一样。

You should add some words,“其实他们的爱情很浪漫，跟电影描写的一样。”

6.他们不仅接受彼此的缺点，而且觉得爱人的缺点很可爱。可能这是他们的爱情关键。

I should say this sentence is very good ,but you can make it better like“他们不仅能够接受彼此的缺点，而且觉得爱人的缺点很可爱。可能这是他们爱情的关键。

keep practicing and I think you can make great progress