My Dream about England
Lois Lowry says, "I feel sorry for anyone who is in a place where he feels strange and stupid." This is my problem. Since I was a child, I was sure about what really interests me. I traveled for the first time when I was 12 years old. My parents took me around Italy. I visited Rome, the city of the love and Florence, the city of the culture. Sleeping on an uncomfortable bed, dreamed about my life as a student. Two years after this trip, I started High School. My choice was not difficult. I have thought about an admirable future, so I decided to learn Languages! I probably already knew that one day I would leave my country. Now, I'm sure about this. Italy can't offer me the expectations I have. I'm working hard to follow my dream. I would like to visit England. I know a little about the UK: Internet, films, and books suggest to me that I have to go there.This country opens up news possibilities to want to be happy. First of all, I would love to improve my English. I am positive that will be useful for my career prospects. Also, England offers beautiful landscapes to visit. For example: Stonehenge, the Lincoln Cathedral, the city of Nottingham and Newcastle. The UK is the country of the arts and sciences,of the folkore and customs. Also, it's the metropolitan of the devolpment (
I am not sure what you mean here),with a nice chaotic lifestyle. Maybe one day I will be lucky and I will finally be able to say: 'England is my home."
This is a great entry! You write very well. One thing I would point out is that you don't put spaces after your punctuation (periods and commas). In doing so, you are making your text difficult to read, and it is grammatically incorrect. One other small detail is that you should lead into a quotation with a comma, not a colon. Colons should only be used for lists, such as you have already written.
Great job!