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While Emma was talking on the phone with her buggy Tiffany. she asked her to speak faster because her cell phone's battery was running out of energy. At the time when Tiffany was about to tell her best friend something important, Emma's cell phone went dead. Emma got peeved. She decided to leave a house, got in her car and drove off to Tiffany in no time. Emma was so excited and she wanted get Tiffany's immediately. Unfortunately the girl got stuck in traffic jam. The traffic was snarled up because of an accident. Emma got steaming mad thinking that she would never get out of the road. In the end, after an hour delay on the road she arrived at Tiffany's. Her friend has been in the loop so Emma finally got to know the true story.
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Could you please correct this note? Thank in advance.
When Emma was talking on the phone with her buddy. Tiffany she asked her to speak faster because her cell phone 's battery was running out of energy.Then when Tiffany was about to tell her best friend something important, Emma's cell phone went dead. Emma got peeved. She decided to leave the house, got in her car and drove off to Tiffany . Emma was so excited and she wanted get Tiffany's immediately. Unfortunately the girl got stuck in a traffic jam. The traffic was snarled up because of an accident. Emma got steaming mad thinking that she would never reach. In the end, after an hour's delay on the road she arrived at Tiffany's.0
Could you please correct this note? Thank in advance.
While Emma was talking on the phone with her buggy (buggy? Maybe "buddy" is what you meant?) Tiffany, she asked her to speak faster because her cell phone's battery was running out of energy. At the time when Tiffany was about to tell her best friend something important, Emma's cell phone went dead. Emma got peeved (I would use "mad" -- "peeved" is slang and not many people use that word).. She decided to leave a the house, got in her car, and drove off to see Tiffany in no time. Emma was so excited and she wanted get Tiffany's immediately. Unfortunately the girl she got stuck in traffic jam. The traffic was snarled (I wouldn't use this word. It's weird and not common. Usually we say the traffic is "backed up") backed up because of an accident. Emma got steaming mad thinking that she would never get out of the road traffic jam. In the end, after an hour delay on the road, she arrived at Tiffany's. Her friend has been in the loop so Emma finally got to know the true story.Great job!
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