How to get a date at(una fiesta es un evento, no un lugar) a party

Have you ever met a girl in a party; you start talking but after a couple of minutes you don’t have the faintest idea of what to talk about? It often happens, but don’t worry;(semicolon porque esos son dos fraces independentes) I know something that can help you.

In any social event, you’re problably with a group of friends until you find a good looking girl. In that precise moment, if you have the courage you’ll approach her to start a conversation. Incredibly, she’s nice with you so both start talking;(semicolon, misma razón) A few minutes has passed and you’re out of topics. That’s when that awkward moment begins. You think of something to make her laugh while she’s thinking of a good way to get away from you. So what happened? Although, you started off on the right foot, things didn’t finish well(well describe "finish", no "things").

Many reasons can explain this uncomfortable moment. First, you’ve just gotten("gotten" es el participio de get) the peak of the conversation but you didn’t realize when it was going to sink. When you notice that a conversation is getting good, get ready to come up with something to get out of there. You can make up some excuse about coming back with your friends, for example. You haven’t lost anything but you left her with that good memory rather than an awkward moment. The next time she sees you, she will remember that good conversation you had. So you can carry on from where you left or just start a new conversation.

It seems as if you’re ignoring her. However, you’re making her miss you. You leave her desiring something more;(semicolon) Apart from that, you don’t want to waste your time with a girl who might have a boyfriend.

(Sólo hablé sobre puntuación porque su inglés es muy bueno. Muchas que habla inglés con fluencia no usan puntuación correctamente, así solo es importante para situaciones formales ¡Y muchas gracias para la aconseja! Si tienes algunos preguntas sobre mis correcciones, envíame un mensaje)

Letter to Bill

Dear Bill,

I’m glad for you letter. My computer is just 2 years old(en ingles edad es "es 2 años veijo" en lugar de "tiene 2 años") so it’s practically new. I use my computer for playing computer games, watching videos on youtube("watch" es para videos, televisión, y peliculas. pero se puede usar "see" para peliculas tambien) and doing homeworks("homework" nunca está plural). Currently I have several videos about cycling for uploading to youtube(el accion está ocurriendo ahora, así usarías el presente progresivo). I love playing computer games; I have been playing since I was a child. I prefer playing games about races and football however I don’t like playing computer games about fighting("fight" es una pelea specifica, "fights" es peleas en general, y "fighting" es el acción de pelear).
The last week I bought a mobile phone; it’s very big and I can connect with my car to listen to music(si dices "para hacer algo" y "para" significa "lograr", dirías "to do something") while I am driving.

Hugs (En inglés, no es común decir "hugs", pero puedes decirlo si estás escribiendo a alguien en su familia)

Alberto

(si tienes más preguntas, puede enviarme un mensaje. lo siento por mi español)

ielts writing part 1 cement and concrete making processes

The given diagrams illustrate how cement is made and how it is possible to mix it with other components in certain proportions to create a conrete.
In the first diagram we can see that it is needed two kinds of material are needed to start producing of cement - limestone and clay. They both should be crushed at first and then mixed toghether. After passing the mixer, the mixture of clay and limestone moves to a rotating heater where it is subjected to a firing at high temperature. Following being fired every piece of this mixture is made smaller in size by grinder. As a result of this process we have ready cement, which should be packed in bags and delivered to constructions sites.
The second diagram shows us the process of making concrete. In comparison with the process of cement creation it is much more simplier. All that is needed is just to put 15 % of cement, 10% of water and 25 % of sand in a huge concrete mixer, and to add there 50% of small stones which are called "gravel".

(If you want any explanations for my changes, let me know)