Both are good! The first sounds a bit more literary.

The first sentence is unclear to me...I'll try to make it clearer but I'm not 100% sure what the text is trying to say. But see what you think of this attempt:

The all-inclusive recitation of God's names, as is used when asking God for forgiveness, or as it used during invocations which send greetings to Prophet Muhammad and his household, does not require the permission of a master unless the number of invocations or requests for God's forgiveness is so great that it would be necessary to spend a forty-day period of seclusion to complete the recitation. 

The House in a small Village.

A pleasant front Garden. There are boxes with flowers on the windows. Tiled roof. The yard is clean. All is very nealy . neat. (or "tidy") There isn't a single dry leaf. The cat sleeps under the apple tree curled up.
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Домик в маленькой деревушке. Приятный палисадник. На окнах ящики с цветами. Черепичная крыша. Чистый дворик. Всё очень аккуратно. Ни одного сухого листика. Под яблоней, свернувшись клубочком, спит кошка.

Hi! I think the main suggestion here would be that you try to tighten up your writing. In other words, in English, it's generally better and clearer if you can express something in the fewest words.Figure out which words and phrases aren't really saying anything important and eliminate them. The phrase 'It is a well known fact' can usually be eliminated -- it's better to get to your point right away.

It is a well-known fact that  A good academic writer should take into account some certain aspects considerations when they create a research paper or an article, as the way in which they compose the texts will determine the quality of the final product. Therefore, it seems to me that the cultivates certain habits of mind of academic writers are related to guarantee the truthfulness and quality of the final results research papers and articles. In that way, some important habits could be related with  Having a clear sense of purpose of the text, due to the fact, it will help the writer describe a logical progression of ideas in order to clearly and directly.

Another important fact, is that Academic  Writers should have a solid command of their topic or the fieldin which they are involved. should have the initiative of   supplemented with research as needed. Nevertheless, The use of the different source materials  and data bases must be judiciously and ethical so as to preserve the truthfulness integrity of the text. Finally, we must not forget that while although the ideas are fundamental to in well proper development of the  a text, it is necessary to bear in mind the style and also the grammar, owing to the fact, as it will demonstrate the kind of writer you are.

Orchestral concerts

I sometimes listen to classical music in my free time. Orchestral music is the most my favorite. Some pro orchestras come to Japan from foreign countries to play every year. Going to their concerts is always entertaining to me. However, the tickets are so expensive, because they costs  must cover moving  transportation expenses in addition to the player’s players' fees. As a result, I can only go to one or two concerts per year.

Orchestral is the adjectival form of orchestra. 

are you on a PC or a Mac?