Volunteer work

Last year I started to do volunteer work in an institution that helps children with cancer. I have wanted to do volunteer work for a long time. When the chance came up I didn't let it go. I got to know this institution because I had wanted to donate my hair at the time so I asked my friend if she knew of a place and she told me about it. I visited its website and there was a vacancy in its bazaar. So I joined. When I arrived <s>there</s>, there were other candidates and the psychologist gave us a tour. I was amazed how beautiful and inviting the place was. <s>Then </s>In the interview, I was asked if I wanted to work in the children's recreation area and at first, I was afraid but then I said yes. This year my cousin had cancer but fortunately he's cured now. I'm living in a different town now. In my hometown, which is a small city, there aren't any institutions like that but I still help at the church as an altar boy, a reader or as a catechist. Nowadays, I don't attend <s>at</s> the church as much I used to.

Violet shows a style preference, not a required correction:

started --> began

I didn't let it go --> I grabbed it (a common idiomatic use)

Not everything to be learned is contained in books

When talking about ways of learning new things, we can generally divide people in two categories: the ones that can have a great understanding of the subject just by reading a book and the ones that learn better through experience and observation. To establish which technique of learning is more relevant, we must compare and contrast the qualities of both methods.

We can analyze this topic by taking doctors as an example. In medical school, future doctors need to read a lot because they must have a great knowledge about different diseases, their causes and ways to cure them. However, in order to prepare themselves for performing <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">a</s> surgery, books are not enough. Future doctors need to practice their skills because their sharpness and abilities grow with experience. Therefore, for the intellectual improvement on this profession, both sources of knowledge are equally important.

In order to improve in other areas, such as the relationship between the doctor and the patient, the same <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">med</s> student will only learn how to behave by observing and through personal experience. No book will teach the proper way to talk to someone that is passing through a hard time or how make the patient trust the orientations. Every profession has a side that is only improved by experience and there is where the uniqueness of amazing professionalism resides.

The knowledge that someone accumulates in a lifetime of different experiences is what makes his or her work and life progress. Not everything is contained in a book. With real life interactions, we can solve real life problems. By simulating environments where people can learn by experiencing things on their own, we will have better professionals.

<em>I don't believe that you're only talking about </em><em style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">intellectual</em><em> improvement here. Perhaps you should use another term that describes the need for both knowledge and experience.</em>

<em style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">Orientations </em><em>doesn't make sense to me in this context. </em>

Dear Life Ming

Dear Life Ming,

I'm sorry to hear that you are having

trouble <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">in</s> learning English. As we all know,

English is very important. We can communicate with foreigners all over the world

if we learn English well. Here are some tips

on how to learn English well: First, you should listen to English teacher carefully in class.

Next, you should listen to English songs and

watch English news. It's very good for you.

Then, you should take notes in English. Finally,

you can ask your classmates to learn English. I believe you can succeed.

Your's,

Like Hua

It would be more correct to use: <em>Your's truly</em> or <em>Your's sincerely</em>

An introduction to tourist attractions for a newly-arrived foreigner

Dear Mr. Cook,

I am writing to introduce you to some typical and well-known attractions in the city of Guangzhou.

First, I would recommend the Lingnan Impression Park, which is famous for its unique and traditional South China culture located in the Higher Education Mega Centre. Plenty of Lingnan style architecture are found in the park embellished with exquisite carvings, statues, paintings and ornate scrolls. Also, if you are interested in <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">the</s> modern life and local food, Shangxiajiu Pedestrian Street, I think, is a perfect choice to get a first taste of Guangzhou. Last but not least, Sun-Yatsen University is worth visiting. It is considered <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">as</s> one of the most beautiful university campuses in China with a variety of plants and buildings more than 100 years old.

I hope that my recommendation is helpful and if you need further information or assistance, please reply.

Your's sincerely,

Li Ming

Options:

South China culture also: <em> Southern Chinese culture</em>

is worth also: <em> is worthwhile to visit</em>

reply much better to say: <em> please don't hesitate to contact me.</em>