1) Everyone's gone crazy over this new model of phone, they are even scrambling to get it the shop. A scramble is usually used in sports but people do scramble for things, usually the -ing form. "People were scrambling to get in Walmart for the Black Friday sales!" Enter is fine but you will usually say "get in" in real life. "Go get in the car." I tried to get in the bank as soon as it opened." 2) I could see a startled look ON his face when the teacher asked who did it. (Good sentence) "The Halloween costume was startling." There is also a slight difference in "startled" and "scared/frightened/afraid" Startled usually means sort of a combination of scared/shocked like when someone jumps out of hiding. 3) You can pour cereal in a bowl add some milk and then grind some chocolate on top. 4) the book tells about A pathetic sailor who became A wonderful writer after several years of stubborn study. "Gorgeous" refers to attractive appearance and in the UK I've seen it refer to delicious flavors. (Maybe the more he studied the prettier he became?) The book tells of an ugly duckling who became a gorgeous swan once fully grown. (That is a real book) 5) You can't impose your perspective on people. (fine as is) "If you could just look at it from my perspective you would understand." "That's just your perspective, it doesn't mean it is right." 6) Everything he did was reckless and eventually he ended up in the grave. Similar - "He lived a reckless life so he died young." "All he did was act recklessly and it got him killed!" "His recklessness lead to his demise." Hopefully these help, J

1) Everyone goes crazy with this new model of phone, there is even a scramble to enter the shop. (Good) 2) I could see a startled look on his face when the teacher asked who did it. (Correction) 3) You can pour cereal in a bowl, add milk and then grind some chocolate on top. (Correction) 4) The book tells about a pathetic sailor who became wonderful writer after several years of stubborn study. (Correction) 5) You can't impose your perspective on people. (Good) 6) Everything he did was reckless and he eventually ended up in the grave. (Correction)

4. The book tells about a pathetic sailor who became a (brilliant?) writer after several years of (diligent?) study.

1. Everyone has gone crazy with this new model of phone, there was a scramble to enter the shop. 3. You can pour cereals and milk in a bowl and then grind some chocolate on the top. 5. You can't impose your perspective on other people.