how to write a statement ?

i need to write a statement for ielts test council to support my test performance, but i have no idea about this statement,please help me to check it, or give me some advice.

During past two <em>(numbers less than 10 are normally written out)</em> months, I learned studied <em>(learned and studied are similar in 汉语, but in this sentence "learned" means something like "mastered")</em> English at almost every moment. For the reading test, I read a lot of famous English novels fictions <em>("fiction" is not normally pluralized, you could also say "...works of fiction...")</em>, for example, <em>The Old Man and the Sea</em>, <em>Jane Eyre</em>, and <em>Life of PI (book titles should be in italics or should be underlined)</em>. Additionally, I read the BBC news everyday on my phone, after this, I have known learned dozens of formal vocabulary words and complex grammatical items. Also, I can practiced <em>(still talking about the past two months)</em> listening when I by pressing the button on the APP, receiving freshest news immediately. Besides these methods, I used language learning websites to practice my oral English, such as <em>(I would just use the name of the website rather than the full address, but it is your choice) </em>http://www.seendio.com/ and http://www.italki.com/. From these websites, I can make many foreign friends; <em>(when you use a semi-colon, make sure the relationship between the two clauses is clear) </em>using sites like these makes me feel really useful effective <em>("effective" is a better word here, "useful" puts emphasis on what you do for others, while "effective" emphasizes your English-language ability)</em>. Talking with my foreign teachers can help me to overcome the nervousness and feelings of awkwardness <em>(or you could also say "...overcome the nervous and awkward feeling I get when using English</em>."). Additionally, these websites have a function which i can allows me to post a easy simple or a short article on the websites, and other native speakers or teachers would can help I me to check it, hence, enhancing my writing skills  could be enhanced.
In conclusion, I can promise that my performance on the test was is reliable and there are no cheating behaviors at all.

My Hobbies and Recreational Activities 

I have many ways of to while away s  the time. For example, I enjoy playing guitar, reading, dancing and surfing on the internet. But my favorite one hobby is listening to music. Someone who told me that I am always listening to music with on my earphones no matter what I am doing. What should can I say? I just like it love music! 
I enjoy listening to almost all any kind of music, such as pop, blues, folk, rock, hip-hop, jazz, and country. Oh, yes, and my favorite is rock and roll. I just find it so cool. It's also a good way of relaxing myself, when I listen to a piece of rock and roll. These therefore music can be an outlet for my tiredness and pressure from studies.
Some like reading and arts, some like sports and adventure, and others are addicted to the net, but for me, playing guitar is my favorite pastime in my spare time. Though l'm not perfectly skilled in playing guitar, it's another way to relax myself or just a way to amuse myself. As for me，It's I'd rather be busy with my hobbies and recreational activites than to sit around and do nothing when I have free time is free, because I just hate being bored.