Veranda (fixed)

I have one little veranda in my house. I smoke on there it every morning, just  exactly at the moment W when the sun comes up rises .
I sit on a chair having in a status of indistinct consciousness; I pick up one of my cigarettes and quietly bite it on my mouth.  put it between my lips.  
Through the window, I can see several trees wavering in the winds, though it is all I can see except for the dense flats.
I gazed at them for a little and asked one of them "How can you be so lively alive?" but it  assumed seemed clueless .
So, I just tipped off the ashes of my jealousy into the ashtray and got up and went out from of there.
I guess, It repeats every morning. Tomorrow I will probably go on out to the veranda next day, sit in the same spot. And envy the trees again.

Well done!!!! you are just getting better and better ^_^ I'm proud of you !

Myself

Myself,what I used to believe in-; now it is all gone anyway. away.
Why did I wanted to change my self so desperately ?
The people who come become closer to me after the time, however, as time passes-; I know they are going to leave me anyway.
Then why did I wanted to change my self so severely?
I asked to my self whispering into my mind, but there was no answer, except an emptiness-; since it wasn't already in me.
So now, I look into  upon my self, wondering if you are lying hidden-; I will reach out my hand anyway.

Except can be replaced with but ( but you can keep it as well)

Beautiful words!!! Amazing ideas and phrases , very well done you are really improving!! this is really beautiful!!!

Sleepless

Recently, I cannot sleep at when other people usually go to sleep, I am often being awake till the sunrise and then, I fall asleep. And during the that time, at dawn, some thoughts come over to my head. I must say it is they are neither important nor clear, though it is obvious that every all the thoughts are related to regrets.

You can say instade of "come over my head " , "take over my head " 

 Very good job!! I really like this ^_^

about car

it was so lovely day.firstly, he unlock to car, he got in car, started the car, turned on the radio and turned down to aricondation .

I don't know if you are talking about yourself if you are then the correct way of speaking about yourself would be by using "I"
you say : it was such a lovely day.first, I unlocked the car, I got in car, started the car, turned on the radio and turned down the aricondation .

if you are talking about another male you can say "he" and replace "I"  

I want to learn english

I want to go to England beacuse I want to see the Harry Potter station and the 9 and 3/4 platform .
I really like Harry Potter . Harry Potter is very interesting because of the fantastic magic and special foods for example the frog chocolates.

While talking about the names of people and countries make sure to always capitalize the first letter
Good job!!! keep working on your grammar ^___^ I hope this helped