1.演出从两点开始，在( “在”means "at" )三点结束。

2.我喜欢时尚衣服很漂亮舒适（the underlined part is hard to understand, if you want to say"I like fashionable clothes because they are beautiful and comfortable.", you need to put  a “因为” in the front of “很漂亮舒适”. if beauty and comfort is not the reason that you like fashionable clothes, you can make the underlined part be another sentence because "我喜欢时尚衣服" and"很漂亮舒适" don't have clear logistic relations）。

    If the my guess is right, the second sentence can be rivised like that:

version1:我喜欢时尚衣服因为它们很漂亮而且（'而且"means "and", it is used to connect two adjective）很舒适。

version2:我喜欢时尚衣服。它们很漂亮而且很舒适。

2.在她出去的时候，她穿一红（In your story, can I add "红" here?）披风，所以所有在农村的人都（"都" means "all"）叫她“小红帽”。

3.一天早上，小红帽要求问（if you want to say "ask", I suggest you use "问", not "要求" to make Chinese think that Little Red Hat is obedient）她妈妈如果可以她去见面她奶奶能不能去看奶奶（in this sentence, "能不能"means "whether", "visit her grandma" should be translated into “她奶奶”, considering that there has been a subject "小红帽" and "她奶奶" is vulgar language, I suggest you remove "她" from "她奶奶"），因为很久不见她没有去看她了（you should use present perfect tense here and to make this sentence more natural, I suggest you replace "不" with "没有"）。

Thank you, that's a good story.

1.我爱芝加哥。它是一座很漂亮的城市。

2.大家喜欢在密西根湖里游泳。

3.我不怎么喜欢游泳，可是我带我的照相机照片。（this sentence lacks a time, When do you take photos with your camera, in Summer or in weekends? What's more, this sentence lacks a verb, if you want to express the meaning of "take photos", please use "照相" instead of "照片", because "照片" is only a noun. ）

4.By the way, if you do not want to remove "照片", just add a verb before "照片", such as "拍" and the sentence wil be that: "可是我带我的照相机拍照片"。