Writing Practice

A: I can't believe this. It's the sixth time in a row I've won. I'm on a winning streak.
B: Yeah, that's true. If I were you I started to think about an exit strategy. I wouldn't push my luck too far.
A: Come on. We're having fun here. Just don't stress me out and relax.
B: Sure, I was just giving some advice. You do remember what happened last week, right?
A: Tell you what! This is my last play. I'm going for broke.

Thanks for any feedback you can provide.

Be forewarned in America if you say "No offense" people will expect what you are saying next to be rude or offensive. For example, "No offense but you don't look good today". However if you say "You don't look good today", and they say something back, then you say "No offence meant" then it is more of an appology.

Diary*Looking for Correction

Nothing special happened today. It kept raining all day which made the air fresh and *nice to smell. I think that I need to improve my business English communication skills because my colleges keeps sending me English email,but I can only use Chinese to reply them,it is very unprofessional.
I need to buy some gifts for my family members. *The day after tomorrow I will leave Beijing and go home.

*or you could write "I need to buy some gifts for my family members because day after tomorrow I will leave Beijing and go home." Using the word "because" connects the two thoughts together.

Diary

I wish you a merry Mid-Autumn Festival!
I arrived at home 4pm, at the moment I saw my family I felt like all of the traveling was worth it . On my way back home I read a book about business English and I was consentrating so hard that I nearly missed my station to get off the train. This happens a lot when I take subway in Beijing *, when I read book I will forget everything else, so I will miss my station, and the worse thing is that when I take another subway to head back and I continue reading a book I will miss my station again , and so on and so forth囧.

*When you add the word "this" to the begining of the sentance, the reader knows that the action is the one that happened in the prevous sentance, so you don't need to repeat it.

Diary-looking for correction

The weather here in Beijing is getting more and more cold now,because the autumn is coming. This week only has three workdays, because this Thursday is china's traditional festival 'Mid-autumn'. This means family members will gather together to celebrate it by eating moon cake ,which is regarded as moon and family union.I can not wait to eat it with my family and enjoy the festival now,I wish time could pass faster haha.

Although, saying The weather here in Beijing "is getting more and more cold" would be a correct way to say it. Most people would just say The weather here in Beijing "keeps getting colder".