IELTS Academic writing task 1

Hello! Below, I write wrote here below my answer to a sample writing task 1 found in on this website: http://www.dcielts.com/task-1-2/a-model-bar-chart-report-step-by-step/

Instructions are: The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
(20 minutes; 150 words as a minimum)

My answer:
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The two charts show the results of a survey about the most popular leisure activities in the USA in two selected years: 1999 and 2009.

In 1999 the most popular activity was walking, with 29% of people choosing it. The second more most popular activity was soccer, with 17% of people. Hobbies as like aerobics, bicycling, swimming, camping and jogging each totalized percentages between 13% and 7% respectively. The least popular sport was yoga, that which only obtained only 5%.

In 2009 walking was still the most popularv activity and increased by 2% (Or percent) points per cent. Soccer remained about the same, at 18%, and was reached met by swimming as well, which that thus resulted to have in twice as many doubled its participants. Camping, as well, remained almost the same, while a new entry, weightlifting, reached 10%. Bicycling reduced of to 5% and yoga was not more practiced by the people interviewed people. In 2009 the least popular activities were then aerobics and jogging, that which achieved respectively 4% and 3%.
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Introducing myself

Well, hi there! :D
I'm learning English because of my school, you know, I want to study robotics so I have to speak english perfectly. Right now, I'm studying at the UNAM in Mexico city,.I wanna make friends who speak english so who can learn spanish :)
Of course my native language is spanish and I grew up in Mexico city.
I enjoy reading novels and I realy love maths :)
I'd like to meet you or chat to you, that's what I mean(?). :)

The serial killer's murderous innocence ( part 2)

There are two fundamentally opposed models of communication and relationship with their peer groups:
1. the model of the scapegoat: they are children who, from the first day of school, have been harassed by classmates and have had to endure many kind of jokes and insults. Over the years, the subject accepts of being a "scapegoat" and does not make do anything to get out of this situation, except to retreat even further into his fantasy world.Those The rare times when the offense is severe enough to unleash his a reaction, he proves to have an unexpected strength, given by as a result of the enormous amount of anger accumulated during over the years of frustration, both at home and away.
2. the model of bullying: it is the opposite to of the previous situation. Children are particularly aggressive in their relations with among the peers group, assume assuming the leadership and venting their anger against on other children.

These are only a series of few indicators (the so-called "red flags") of a future behavior seriously deviant to which the experts of the sector have attributed a significant predictive value in relation to a possible future of murderous fury.

The serial killer's murderous innocence ( part 1)

"We serial killers are your sons, we are your husbands, we are everywhere." Ted Bundy said (guilty of at least 30 or 35 murders of young women in the USA)

The murderer is the expression of energy-related aggression that civilization represses and stifles, of anger whose strength and violence scares, of a suffocated and inhibited sexuality. All these rejected energies, take on distorted connotations and manifest themselves in individuals at risk.

The killers are subjects incapable of relating in empathy with the others, even though with a cursory examination, they may seem to be people well-adjusted in the community and with a normal relational life. Their interaction with others is based on the communicative relationships distorted by which people are mere "objects" that are designed to meet their needs.

The origins of homicidal behavior are nearly always found in relationship issues that arise during the childhood and the adolescence of these subjects at risk.

By examining the cases, we note that many killers, especially -- the serial ones -- are illegitimate children, children of an abusive parent (usually the father, while the other is submissive, often the mother), orphaned by one or both parents or have experienced a childhood characterized by physical, psychological and / or sexual abuse perpetrated by one or both parents.
So the parental figure is responsible for serial killers a real persecutionthat, consciously or not, guides them in assessing their victims and in premeditating their murder.

Regarding the relations with their peer group, all serial killers show serious relational difficulties with others and usually have poor social skillsa social life very poor. These problems are the logical consequences of a developmental period lived mostly in seclusion with serious relationship problems. The child's problems evinced in the school and in relationships with his peers, show reflect the experiences from family lived in his family, which, often hasnot haven't been an appropriate models of communication.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I studied English a long time ago. I use it a little at work, but my listening and speaking English of English is poor. So I want to find a nice teacher to improve my  English.
I am from China.

Keep it up, man. 

:D

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning English, because I work in the on an airline. I have to read many different agreementes of foreign companiones. But I do not take part in talks meetings. I legislate payment to foreign companiones for the lease rent, for the fuel services to for the aircraft, for the services on the handling of the flights, and for the ATI for the plane. I have to know and speak English, because I like my jJob.

Nice job, keep up the good work. :D