Bad Weather

Jinan has had bad weather lately,. A succession of dull damp days downs the spirits. and I also have been a cold, a headache, and insomnia. I found I lost my weight yesterday, and this is what I've been I was looking forward to, but the I feeling was not feeling that good. Now sky it is rainning and snowing and I do not know how should I go to if I will go to my classes tomorrow. Now I'm going to change put on my shoes and go out to eat dinner.

Alternative:
Lately, the weather in Jinan has been bad.  For days the weather has been damp and cold.  I have had headaches and insomnia.  Though, yesterday I found out that I lost weight.  I should have been happy about losing weight, but I was not feeling very well.  Now it is raining and snowing and I am unsure whether I will want to go to class tomorrow.  Well, I am goint to go put on my shoes and go out to eat dinner.

Good job 小。

Original text:

Are you happy

when I walk along the road, I feel happy. When I ride my bike to roam, I feel happy. When I sit in cafe, I feel happy. Then I realize happy is a simple thing.
However, many people lost it.They had it.
They are busy with so-called "life". One day, they realized they lost something.At beginning, they didin't know what they lost. Then they felt sad,hurting.They aren't confident in life.
that's the life.Are you happy? Do you lost your happy.
Give yourself a vacation. Think about your life.

Corrected text:

Are you happy?

When I walk along the road, I feel happy.  When I ride roam about on my bike to roam, I feel happy. When I sit in a cafe, I feel happy. Then I realize that being "happy" is a simple thing. 
However, many people have forgotten how to be happy.  They have lost their way.
They are busy with so-called "life". One day, they realized they lost something. At beginning, they didin't know what they lost.

They are preoccupied and busy completing tasks and fufilling others wishes.  One day, they become aware that they have lost something in their life.  At first, they are not sure what they are lacking ( lacking = missing ).

Then they feel sad and they suffer. felt sad,hurting.They have lost their confidence. aren't confident in life. 
That is (the ???) life.  Do you lost your happy.  Have you lost your happiness?  Are you happy?
Give yourself a vacation. Take a vacation and take some time for yourself.  Think about your life. ( Contemplate life.  What do you enjoy?  What makes you happy )

Original text  原文:

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning English,because English is most widespread language in the world, I want to make friends from all over the world.
My native language is Chinese，and I grew up in China.
I am crazy in travelling！

Very good job :)  很好

Corrected text  正确的文本:

First notebook entry: Introducing myself ( Introduction, Introducing myself )

I am learning English because English it is the most widespread commonly used language in the world.  I want to make friends who are from all over the world. 
I grew up in China, so my native language is Chinese.
I am crazy about in travelling！

Alternative examples 另一种例子:

I love traveling

I absolutely love traveling

My favorite hobby is traveling.  I love it.

English is spoken all over the world.  It is the international language.

The use of english is "wide spread".

I study english because it is ubiquitous ( ubiquitous = omnipresent )

I hope to meet friends from many places throughout the world.

Original text 原文:

The real of me

My Chinese name is Liao qiongfang and I am 24 years old.There are 5 people in my family,my father,my mother,my old sister,my old brother and me.We love each other and live a happy life.My old sister have married.But I am still single.My hobbies are including make friends,traveling,swimming,singing and dancing.I am a lively and cheerful girl,sometimes I have a little willful.

Good job :)  很好, marvilloso, muito bem :)

Corrected text 纠正文:

The real of me

My name is Liao qiongfang and I am 24 years old.  There are five people in my family.  My father, mother, old sister, old brother and me.  We love each other and we live a happy life.  My older sister have is married, but I am still single.  My hobbies are traveling, swimming, dancing and making new friends.  I am a lively and cheerful girl.  Sometimes I am a little bit (little bit = 一点) (willful 设么？).

Note:  把两个空间之间的期间在句末标点符号和下一句的开头。把一个逗号后的一个空间

Put two spaces after the period at the end of a sentence and the word at the begining of the next sentence.  (.  The) Put one space between a comma and the next word. (sister, brother) 

Note:  There is a large difference in meaning between "my old sister" and my "older sister" You intended to use "older sister".

Note:  In american culture it is not necessary to mention whether a sibling ( brother, sister ) is older or younger in order to be respectful.  You can mention this because it is interesting, but it is not necessary in order to maintain respect.

Hello everybody!  I am Cindy

I am from China and I am learning english.  I want to work abroad in Australia.

My native languages are chinese and korean.

I enjoy meeting friends from all over the world.  Especially people who speak english natively.  Of course, I would like to teach you standard chinese.  

I hope you would consider adding my MSN: [email protected] or 

QQ: 416196244

Original text:

Daydream OR Plan???

As a girl,I often think of some things supposed to take place in the future when I have nothing to do. For example, I ofen think about what kind of style should be used in my future house, what the animals i should keep, and even what plants i should buy to decorate my future house and my future life. I even think that maybe one day i can take a very healthy and cute dog or cat to travel with me if I decide to be single forever.
Honestly,I don't know these fancy things r sort of plans or just daydream!

Very good job :)  很好  Marvilloso， Muito bem！

Corrected text:

A Daydream Or a Plan???  ( Daydream or Plan? )

As a young woman, when I have idle (spare) time, I often day dream and ponder ( think about ) potential events of my life in the future. think of some things supposed to take place in the future when I have nothing to do. For example, I often think about what style of house I would want. ( The use of the subjunctive " would" communicates that something is possible. Such as a future house.) what kind of style should be used in my future house,  What the animals i should keep, pets would I have? (Note: domesticated animals that you posess and care for, such as dogs, cats, birds, fish, hamsters, rabbits, etc ( etcetera ) are referred to as pets.  An animal that is considered to be exotic or wild would be referred to as an animal.) and even what Which plants I should buy to decorate my future house and my future life. I even think that maybe one day i can take a very healthy and cute dog or cat to travel with me if I decide to be single forever. 
Honestly, I don't know these fancy things am not familiar with these luxuries in my current life, I just ponder and daydream!