Please correct my note (COACHING) :)
Please correct my note to be idiomatic English.
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COACHING
I went to get took part in a / participated in a life coaching lifestyle consultation program today. Today's theme The theme today is was (past tense, because it already happened) seeing myself objectively and analizing it. focused on observing and analyzing one's personal traits. This/Here is what I learned.
A Pperson's character is said to be classified into 3 three major general types, and additionally, from the three types, two of them these can be devided divided into 2 two types subcategories each. (subcategories is better than using the word "type". As much as possible, refrain from using words redundantly)
・Parent(controlling Parent, Nuturing Parent)
・Adult
・Child(Free Child, Adapted Child)
Each type has positive and negative point. There are pros and cons to each category. It is said that an "Aadult" is the ideal self. "Adult" person is Adults are so rational that in which they can listen to others, and make a proper decision, and talk communicate reasonably effectively. As a result of Based on the personality test, analysis my personality type is turned out to be "Free Child". This type of person is described as one who is open and curious in a positive light on the surface, but sometimes react and say something emotionally harsh/mean which can lead to an argument. I'll try to control myself much more to be Adult type person be more like an "adult" than a "child" especially when I communicate interact with people.
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Thanks! a lot.
- life coaching Maybe in Japanese, there is a phrase like that, but in English "life consultation" is much more suitable. I never heard of "life coaching" before.
Today's theme It's not wrong, but it's better to separate time-word expressions from a word. From my observation, English speakers tend to write and speak in that way. In Japanese, I think it's common to say an expression like: "今日のテーマは。。”
- seeing myself objectively and analizing it The theme is not about you, but on observing and analyzing one's personal traits in general so it's not good to use "myself". Instead of seeing, you should use observe.
- 3 three In general, spell out single-digit numbers and numbers greater than 9 are written in numerical form. http://www.grammarbook.com/numbers/numbers.asp
- "Adult" person is Adults are so rational You don't need to say "Adult" person, because an adult is already a person. Also, you don't need to exaggerate that adults are very rational with "so". If you say "so" here, then you will sound very sarcastic.
reasonably effectively. Reasonably is ok, but it's better to saay effectively. You're saying that adults are reasonable in which they are capable of rational behavior. On the other hand, kids are reasonable too. But what separates adults from kids is that adults can speak in an effective way than kids.
- This type of person is described as one who is open and curious in a positive light on the surface, You should have "described as one who is" because you're describing that particular person's trait. Also, "on the surface" means outside or physical appearance. In Japanes, I suppose people describe like this: 外では優しいけど、家では鬼。
- I'll try to control myself much more to be Adult type person It is unnatural to say "control" here. You can say control when you want to get a hold of yourself. Control your temper. You're drinkng a lot and you simply have a hard time contorlling yourself. Control/limit the amount of alcohol you consume.
- Thanks a lot. It's fine, but it's better to be simple and not vague. "Thanks a lot" is used in two different ways: 1. as a sarcastic remark 2. equivalent meaning of thanks // If you want to say, thanks a lot, then maybe write it out as "Thanks a lot!"
To smile: Your writing is good and I understood what you were trying to say for the most part. I recommend that you write the sentences in paragraphs because it seems that there are sentences bunched up together. If it's an essay, then writing it with paragraphs is a must. Also, be careful with determiners "a", "an", and "the" and if you need help with these, take a look at: http://www.englishclub.com/grammar/adjectives-determiners-the-a-an.htm
