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Please correct my note (COACHING) :) Please correct my note to be idiomatic English. ----------------- COACHING I went to get life coaching. Today's theme is seeing myself objectively and analizing it. Person's character is said to be classified into 3 major general types, and additionally, two of them can be devided into 2 types each. ・Parent(controlling Parent, Nuturing Parent) ・Adult ・Child(Free Child, Adapted Child) Each type has positive and negative point. It is said that Adult is the ideal self. "Adult" person is so rational that they can listen to others and make a proper decision and talk reasonably. As a result of analysis, my type is turned out to be Free Child. This type of person is open and curious in a positive light, but sometimes react and say something emotionally which can lead to argument. I'll try to control myself much more to be Adult type person especially when communicate with people. ----------- Thanks a lot.

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I went to get a life coaching workshop. Today's theme is was on seeing viewing myself one's self objectively and analizing it self-analysis.


It is said that a person's character is said to can be classified into 3 three major general types. and Additionally, two of them can be divided into 2 two types each.

 

A general rule for nontechnical writing is that whole numbers from one to one hundred are spelled out.

 

・Parent (Controlling Parent, Nurturing Parent)
・Adult
・Child (Free Child, Adapted Adaptive Child)


Each type has positive and negative points. It is said that Adult is the ideal self. The "Adult" person is so the most rational. that They can listen to others, and make a proper decision, and talk reasonably.


As a result of my self-analysis, my type is turned out to be Free Child. This type of person is open and curious in a positive light way, but sometimes he or she can react and say something emotionally which can lead to an argument.


I'll try to control myself much more to be an Adult-type person, especially when communicating with people.

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I went to get a life coaching session today. The theme was seeing myself objectively and then analizing it. 


A person's character is said to be classified into 3 major general types. In addition to this, two of those main types can be further divided into an another 2 types.

 

These three major types, and their further breakdown, are as follows: 
・Parent (meaning a "Controlling Parent", or "Nuturing Parent")
・Adult 
・Child (meaning a "Free Child",  or "Adapted Child")

Each type has positive and negative aspect.


It is said that the "Adult" type is the most ideal. A person who is categorized as an "Adult" is extremely rational. So much so that they have the ability to listen to others, and make a proper decision, and always speak reasonably. 

 

As a result of analysis, my type is turned out to be Free Child. My results from being analyzed in the 3 categories was: the "Free Child" type. それのほうがいい。あなたの文を書く方のは分かることができるけど、ちょっとおかしいと思います。This type of person is open, curious and always sees things in a positive light; however, but sometimes they can react and say something emotionally in an emotional manner. At this point, they could possibly say hurtful things, which could lead to an argument. 

 

I think I'll try to control myself much more in the future in order to become an "Adult" type person — especially when I communicate with other people.

 

すごい!良くできましたね!本当に上手な英語です!全部は分かりやすい。直してあげるのできれな英語になった。

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Please correct my note (COACHING) :)

Please correct my note to be idiomatic English. 
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COACHING

     I went to get took part in a / participated in a life coaching lifestyle consultation program today. Today's theme  The theme today is was (past tense, because it already happened) seeing myself objectively and analizing it. focused on observing and analyzing one's personal traits.  This/Here is what I learned.


     A Pperson's character is said to be classified into 3 three major general types, and additionally, from the three types, two of them these can be devided divided into 2 two types subcategories each. (subcategories is better than using the word "type".  As much as possible, refrain from using words redundantly)

   ・Parent(controlling Parent, Nuturing Parent) 
   ・Adult
   ・Child(Free Child, Adapted Child)

Each type has positive and negative point. There are pros and cons to each category. It is said that an "Aadult" is the ideal self. "Adult" person is Adults are so rational that in which they can listen to others, and make a proper decision, and talk communicate reasonably effectively. As a result of Based on the personality test, analysis my personality type is turned out to be "Free Child". This type of person is described as one who is open and curious in a positive light on the surface, but sometimes react and say something emotionally harsh/mean which can lead to an argument. I'll try to control myself much more to be Adult type person be more like an "adult" than a "child" especially when I communicate interact with people.
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Thanks! a lot. 

- life coaching Maybe in Japanese, there is a phrase like that, but in English "life consultation" is much more suitable.  I never heard of "life coaching" before.

Today's theme It's not wrong, but it's better to separate time-word expressions from a word.  From my observation, English speakers tend to write and speak in that way.  In Japanese, I think it's common to say an expression like: "今日のテーマは。。”

- seeing myself objectively and analizing it  The theme is not about you, but on observing and analyzing one's personal traits in general so it's not good to use "myself".  Instead of seeing, you should use observe.  

- 3 three In general, spell out single-digit numbers and numbers greater than 9 are written in numerical form.  http://www.grammarbook.com/numbers/numbers.asp

- "Adult" person is Adults are so rational  You don't need to say "Adult" person, because an adult is already a person.  Also, you don't need to exaggerate that adults are very rational with "so".  If you say "so" here, then you will sound very sarcastic. 

reasonably effectively. Reasonably is ok, but it's better to saay effectively.  You're saying that adults are reasonable in which they are capable of rational behavior.  On the other hand, kids are reasonable too.  But what separates adults from kids is that adults can speak in an effective way than kids.

- This type of person is described as one who is open and curious in a positive light on the surface,  You should have "described as one who is" because you're describing that particular person's trait. Also, "on the surface" means outside or physical appearance.  In Japanes, I suppose people describe like this:  外では優しいけど、家では鬼。

- I'll try to control myself much more to be Adult type person It is unnatural to say "control" here.  You can say control when you want to get a hold of yourself.  Control your temper.  You're drinkng a lot and you simply have a hard time contorlling yourself.  Control/limit the amount of alcohol you consume.

- Thanks a lot.  It's fine, but it's better to be simple and not vague.  "Thanks a lot" is used in two different ways: 1.  as a sarcastic remark  2.  equivalent meaning of thanks   //  If you want to say, thanks a lot, then maybe write it out as "Thanks a lot!"


To smile:  Your writing is good and I understood what you were trying to say for the most part.  I recommend that you write the sentences in paragraphs because it seems that there are sentences bunched up together.  If it's an essay, then writing it with paragraphs is a must.  Also, be careful with determiners "a", "an", and "the" and if you need help with these, take a look at: http://www.englishclub.com/grammar/adjectives-determiners-the-a-an.htm


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