Plz correct it
Choose a person that you admire and say why you admire the person. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Everyone has someone in their life whom they admire. It might depend on your university major, but <s>maybe </s>we generally admire many people.
<s>Generally, </s>I admire my uncle because he is confident in himself and his goals.
When he was a teenager, he decided to migrate to London without any support. He accepted that no one could help him <s>to </s>be successful in the world except himself.
His parents wholly disagreed with his decision, but he continued anyway.
He changed his major and struggled <s>with a</s> new issues.
He <s>had </s>worked full time to get by. <em style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">You can also say "</em><em style="color: rgb(194, 133, 255);">He worked full time to make ends meet.</em><em style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">" This is a common English phrase.</em>
Eventually, he achieved his goal by working hard. Nowadays, he lives comfortably.
<s>Totally </s>I admire <s>him to</s> my uncle's perseverance and determination. My uncle is also tirelessly forgiving, and tries to be the best person that he can be. <s>in his life he is a super forgiving person</s>.
<s>Maybe </s>I cant say he's my role model, but I'll definitely try to be as successful as he is. <em style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">I don't understand this last sentence -- if you want to be as successful as your uncle is, then, by definition, you are using him as a role model. You can cut down on the words and still sound confident in your writing. I would've written this:</em>
"I don't know if I'll be as successful as my uncle. But I'm definitely going to try."