English writing practice (14 June)
1. The gift shop sells all bells and whistles for Christmas.
2. She always brings a whistle while traveling alone to protect herself.
3. After having a baby, I started getting up at around 5 o'clock in the early morning, because of the time constraints.
4. She bought crappy houses, renovated them, sold and earned a tons of money.
5. This blog lost its competitive edge because the owner created too much advertising contents provided by his sponsors.
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English writing practice (14 June)
1. The gift shop sells all types of bells and whistles for Christmas.
2. She always brings a whistle while traveling alone to protect herself.
3. After having a baby, I started getting up at around 5 o'clock in the early morning, because of the time constraints.
4. She bought crappy houses, renovated them, sold them, and earned a tons of money.
5. This blog lost its competitive edge because the owner featured too much advertising contents from his sponsors.
Thank you kindly for your kind help.
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English writing practice (14 June)
1. The gift shop sells all the bells and whistles for Christmas.
2. When traveling alone, she always brings a whistle to protect herself. changed word order for clarity - she wasn't "traveling alone" in order to "protect herself"
3. After having a baby, I started getting up at around 5 o'clock in the early morning, because of the time constraints. Redundancy
4. She bought crappy* houses, renovated them, sold them, and earned a tons of money.
5. This blog lost its competitive edge because the owner created used or included too much advertising content provided by his sponsors. If the sponsors provided it, then the owner did not "create" it
My English writing practice for today.
Thanks for your kind help.
- Well, "crappy" might be OK in conversation, but it's extremely informal, borderline impolite. But I think it is also the wrong word here, because new construction using cheap materials could also be called "crappy". You need a word that tells us that the houses were in poor condition due to age - after all, renovate means to make new again. So perhaps "dilapidated" (OK, pretty fancy word) or "run-down"?
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English writing practice (14 June)
1. The gift shop sells all bells and whistles for Christmas.
2. She always brings a whistle while travelling alone to protect herself.
3. After having a baby, I started getting up at around 5 o'clock in the early morning, because of the time constraints.
4. She bought crappy houses, renovated them, sold them and earned a tons of money.
5. This blog lost its competitive edge because the owner created too much advertising contents provided by his sponsors.
My English writing practice for today.
Thanks for your kind help.
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