Hi Sela,
I just noticed this is over 3 years too late, but because I already did the suggestions, I might as well post them :)
Regards,
Cameron
Notes:
I would say "follow the suggestions" or "obey the instructions/rules". Suggestions are gentler, whereas obey implies strict compliance.
"As the role of teachers and parents is ..., they are more experienced..." - This suggests that teachers and parents are more experienced <em>because</em> of their responsibility for children.
"... only need to control principle problems...": do you mean "problems of principle" or "principal problems"? Principal means most important in this case. But principles include things like morals and politeness.
In children's education, it is <s>a long </s>an ongoing debate <s>that</s> to what extent children should be controlled. [ / the extent to which children should be controlled has long been debated.] There are two kinds of opinion<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">s</s> on this problem: strict education (obey requirements of teachers and parents) and free education (respect children’s aspirations). In my opinion, the growth of children needs more space.
Proponents of strict education think that it is beneficial to <s>promot</s><s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">ing</s> children’s growth <s>when they</s> to obey the suggestions of parents and teachers. <s>As t </s>The role of teachers and parents is to be responsible for children.<s>, they are more</s> Their experience<s>d</s> and consideration of <s>considerate to</s> the problems in life <s>lives </s>allows them to fulfil this role. For example, if children could obey the rule of staying away from drugs, proposed by parents and teachers, the crime rate <s>will</s> would decline and their health <s>will </s>would not be hurt by drugs. So children will grow safely and healthily under the protection of parents and teachers.
On the other hand, proponents of free education think that children controlled too much will not become independent in adulthood. Due to the long period of depending on their parents and teachers, they could not make decisions and deal with problems by themselves. For example, there is a common phenomenon during the <s>period</s> task of selecting a major in university. Youths do not know much about what they are really interested in. [/ Students do not know much about what really interests them.] They look for help from parents and teachers, and the major recommended by other people is sometimes not suitable for them <s>at some times</s>. So too much control <s>will</s> can lead to serious problems in their lives.
In my view, <s>the</s> flexibility and space in children education <s>is </s>are needed. Every child is an independent individual and not an accessory of their parents. Teachers and parents should respect children’s ideas and only need to control principle problems, such as morals, politeness and drugs. Independent consciousness cultivated from early childhood will benefit a person's whole life. [/ ... will benefit throughout life.]
