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I am looking for people want to learn Chinese. I'm from Beijing, China. Currently, living in London. I have been traveled and lived in lots of parts in the world, such as, Canada, US, France, Italy, Australia, Japan and etc. I understand people's perspectives with their diverse culture background.
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    亲爱朋友们(或者幽默点,也可以是"同胞")，我向你们道歉, 今天没有时间发表我的作文。这就是因为,今天在罗马发现了件有意思的事儿。意大利温度一般很暖和吗(很暖和就可以了,吗多余,但是如果想加的话应该是"嘛")，尤其是罗马城市. 但是今天,大家一早醒来,发现周围被白雪覆盖,很是惊喜. 都是在一个白雪的城市醒来的，都很惊喜(前面罗马,后面罗马人,有点重复)。对于我们来说，在罗马下雪并不常见，这次的大雪是30年来最大的.下雪是近30年下得最大！也就是说大多罗马人都迫不及待的出了门去看罗马的美丽被雪覆盖雪景了。有人拍照，有人散步，有的扔雪球，甚至有人滑雪！(这么写没有问题,但是中文里面有一个经典的句式:有的....有的....还有的) 当然,我也是出去凑热闹的,和朋友们玩耍,照照片. 玩儿的，和朋友去照片。 

     

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    亲爱的朋友们,我向你们道歉.今天,没有时间发表我的作文.因为,发生了件有意思的事儿! 意大利一般天气暖和,尤其是罗马. 今天, 大家一早醒来, 发现周围被白雪覆盖,很是惊喜.对我们来说,罗马下雪并不常见,这次的大雪是30年来最大的.罗马人都迫不及待的出门看雪景了.有的拍照,有的散步,还有的竟然在滑雪! 我也和朋友们凑热闹地加入他们, 一边照相,一边玩耍.

     

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    亲爱朋友，我向你们道歉今天没有时间发表我的作文。这就是因为今天在罗马发现了有意思的事儿。意大利温度一般很暖和吗，尤其是罗马城市，但是今天罗马人都是在一个白雪的城市醒来的，都很惊喜。对于我们罗马人来说，在罗马下雪是不常见的，好像这次下雪是近30年下得最大！也就是说大多罗马人都出了门去看罗马的美丽被雪覆盖。有人拍照，有人散步，有的扔雪球，甚至有人滑雪！ 当然我也是出去玩儿的，和朋友去照片。

     

    -我不知道是不是改大发了,总体感想.比很多中国人写的都好多了.哈哈哈哈.内容和思想,都是按照你的.但句子和用词改了很多. 也许可以启发你.

    啰嗦和重复乃人之常情,无论中国人还是外国人.所以不要介怀.

     

    问题1, 罗马,罗马人重复的很高.尽量学会替换,以及省略.

    问题2, "的"的重复. 大家都爱, 什么的什么的什么的什么. 尽量 变成 什么什么什么的什么.这只是一个例子.

     

    建议 在保证文章内容趣味性的基础上, 能简化的句子和用词,一律精简. 集中火力,描写你觉得最有趣的地方.语言的洗炼, 更凸显你表述的内容. 写下来,繁复读, 删掉一切多余的元素.

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    November 2, 2012
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    我来搅和一下好了，比如你也可以说: "去！把那杯水给我过来！“
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    January 15, 2011
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    People often give advise like: oh. you shouldn't judge people ..... It's such a cliche.
    "Shouldn't judge" becomes they think what a ideal good person should act like. Eventually, they will just to put this thing down and start to judge people at their first sight. What you would like to do and what you actually do are very different concept. It just like, when a person said: "dude, we should really learn something from you." and later it turns out, it's just talk the talk.

    In this world full of judgement. Dressing style is pretty vital. Polish up your style can lead you to a good job than others who don't care. Sometimes It also determines who you will be friends. 



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    January 15, 2011
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    I would say I have certain understanding about british culture. I'm currently studying in UK. I don't interact with people that much. I like to observe from a distance.

    What helps me to understand deeper in this culture?

    -Watch British youtuber's videos, it's about their daily life, what they interest and etc. Listen to their accent to understand their attitude behind the sentence. Also, it's helpful to get your ears used to the language.

    Watch Channel 4, BBC. I watch a lot documentaries, food program, design program and etc. It reveal a lot about how people's opinion, sense of humor, behaviour, lifestyle.

    -Since I am into art and design. To read and view the British design and art, like going to Tate Modern, graphic design, sight seeing some great architecture. This tells you about the asthetics side of the British. 



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    January 15, 2011
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    I have a blog. It's about sharing the things I like crossing from Architecture, Fashion, Interior, Music, Hairdressing to Photography, Chinese Design and etc. It's picture-based. It called <a href="http://www.thepureness.com/">The Pureness</a>.
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    January 15, 2011
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