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woohyuk的小作文: May 10, 2010

BinBin Happy birthday

Tomorrow is my baby's birthday ,He will be 3 years old tomorrow ,He is a small handsome! Very cute,His face have a little baby fat,I always want to knead his face, HAHAHA! .
When I see them ,I feel so happiness .because I think I really grew up,I can take care of them and I had the responsibility!
If I have baby, I think I will love her very much

Happy B'day to our lovely little boy!!! Can't wait to fly to home~~

woohyuk的小作文: May 10, 2010

BinBin Happy birthday



BinBin is my nephew. (要交待清楚BINBIN是谁, 不然别人会误以为是你儿子的). <strike>Tomorrow is my baby's birthday</strike> <font color="#ff00ff">(没必要,和下句意思一样,而且题目已经说了生日快乐,这里显得重复).</font>He will be 3 years old tomorrow. He is a <strike>small</strike> little (形容人用"Little" 形容物用"small") handsome boy (加不加boy意思不同的: "he is a little handsome"意思是"他有点帅" 而且"a little"是"很少,几乎没有"的意思,"he is a little handsome boy" 意思是 "他是个小帅哥")! Very cute! <strike>His face have a little baby fat,</strike>I always want to <strike>knead</strike> pinch his baby fat cheeks, HAHAHA! . (把这两句合并一下就不会显得重复, 这里"掐,捏"用"pinch", "脸蛋儿"用"cheeks"准确一些,因为face是指整张脸) 

When I saw<strike> them (</strike>你用them是想把刚出生那两个小的也包括进去吗? 如果是, 就要说清楚. 否则就改成him). I feel so <strike>happiness</strike> <font color="#ff00ff">happy (感到"幸福"要用形容词, happiness是名词)</font><strike>.because I think</strike> <font color="#ff00ff">and realize  </font>I have really <strike>grew</strike> grown up.("你感到幸福" 和"你认为你长大了"没有很明显的因果关系, 用并列比较好; 觉得自己长大用"realize", 表示意识到, 感觉到的意思, think一般用于思考以后得出的结论,"认为"某事怎么样, 是一种判断) <strike>I can take care of them and I had the responsibility</strike>! (这句话改成: I have the responsibility to take care of them)

If I <strike>have</strike> had a baby, <strike>I think </strike>I <strike>will</strike> would love her/him very much. (因为你现在还没有孩子, 所以要用虚拟语气)

P.S. 下次一定要注意标点的用法

love  xxx