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woohyuk的小作文: May 10, 2010 BinBin Happy birthday Tomorrow is my baby's birthday ,He will be 3 years old tomorrow ,He is a small handsome! Very cute,His face have a little baby fat,I always want to knead his face, HAHAHA! . When I saw them ,I feel so happiness .because I think I really grew up,I can take care of them and I had the responsibility! If I have baby, I think I will love her very much

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 刚才漏了 呵呵

woohyuk的小作文: May 10, 2010

BinBin Happy birthday

Tomorrow is my baby's birthday ,He will be 3 years old tomorrow ,He is a small handsome! Very cute,His face have a little baby fat,I always want to knead his face, HAHAHA! .
When I see them ,I feel so happiness .because I think I really grew up,I can take care of them and I had the responsibility!
If I have baby, I think I will love her very much
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Happy B'day to our lovely little boy!!! Can't wait to fly to home~~

woohyuk的小作文: May 10, 2010

BinBin Happy birthday



BinBin is my nephew. (要交待清楚BINBIN是谁, 不然别人会误以为是你儿子的). Tomorrow is my baby's birthday (没必要,和下句意思一样,而且题目已经说了生日快乐,这里显得重复).He will be 3 years old tomorrow. He is a small little (形容人用"Little" 形容物用"small") handsome boy (加不加boy意思不同的: "he is a little handsome"意思是"他有点帅" 而且"a little"是"很少,几乎没有"的意思,"he is a little handsome boy" 意思是 "他是个小帅哥")! Very cute! His face have a little baby fat,I always want to knead pinch his baby fat cheeks, HAHAHA! . (把这两句合并一下就不会显得重复, 这里"掐,捏"用"pinch", "脸蛋儿"用"cheeks"准确一些,因为face是指整张脸) 

When I saw them (你用them是想把刚出生那两个小的也包括进去吗? 如果是, 就要说清楚. 否则就改成him). I feel so happiness happy (感到"幸福"要用形容词, happiness是名词).because I think and realize  I have really grew grown up.("你感到幸福" 和"你认为你长大了"没有很明显的因果关系, 用并列比较好; 觉得自己长大用"realize", 表示意识到, 感觉到的意思, think一般用于思考以后得出的结论,"认为"某事怎么样, 是一种判断) I can take care of them and I had the responsibility! (这句话改成: I have the responsibility to take care of them)

If I have had a baby, I think I will would love her/him very much. (因为你现在还没有孩子, 所以要用虚拟语气)

P.S. 下次一定要注意标点的用法

love  xxx
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Congratulations kk ..my son will be 1 in a few months. It's great watching your kids grow up ^^

woohyuk的小作文: May 10, 2010

BinBin Happy birthday

Tomorrow is my baby's birthday. He will be 3 years old tomorrow (since you said 'tomorrow' in the first sentence, you don't really need it again). He is a little bit handsome! Very cute. His face has a little baby fat. I always want to squeeze his face, HAHAHA! .
When I see him, I feel so happy because I think I have really grown up. I can take care of him and I am responsible!
If I have another baby, I think I will love her very much.

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