I believe that the generation in which we are born doesn’t effect our personality, but it is our upbringing which influences our character most. According to Psychologists, we emulate love of life from our mothers and there is a direct connection between our mother’s happiness and our future lives. The more a mother tries to seem easy-going and cheerful, the more she instills insecurity and hypocrisy in their kids. This is why it is important to be an example to your kids and influence them to become better people.
Alternately, there are some characteristics that seem to be inherent in certain generations, such as immaturity for my generation, and consciousness for my parents’ generation. It’s no secret that today's youth don’t want to grow up and build families. When my mother turned 20, she had already had a husband and a child and this was quite normal for her generation. I’m 20 years old and I even can’t imagine my life with an infant now.
In conclusion, I'd like to say that this is a kind of philosophical question, so there isn't just one answer. The most important thing is to be wise and overcome the obstacles you face every day. Be open-minded and you’ll have the world at your feet.
This is the corrected essay, as well as some tips for things you may want to practice:
<ul><li>Placement of commas: There were many commas in places where they aren't necessary in English.</li><li>To consider vs. To believe</li><li>You began the essay with the pronoun "your" and then changed it along the way. Try to stick with one throughout your essays!</li><li>affect vs effect</li><li>Alternatively vs. alternately </li><li>In conclusion vs to consume</li></ul>
