My Diary. Note #2.

****This sentence can be interpreted a few ways. Here are some options:

...and learned some useful information about reading and listening.

...and had a useful lesson involving reading and listening.

...and learned some useful tips for reading and listening.

...and had useful lessons in reading and listening.

Please correct my essay:) I'm taking an exam on Sunday. So I need your help!!!

First of all , less stress is more important than having assets. Because, If we become mentally fatigued and quit our jobs, we will suffer severe financial problems. Therefore, I think that working consistently with less pressure is essential to financial stability.

Secondly, having good personal relationships are precious. I have met a lot of elderly people in my workplace. They have not been able to do a lot of things such as memorizing, walking, writing and even eating. If they did not have good personal relationships, they could not enjoy their remaining time. We become old without exception. Therefore, we should not only work too hard but also have fun with family and friends. When we will retire from jobs, these relationships will make our lives wonderful.

For these reasons, I do not think that I need success in business and too much money in my life. Suggestions for last sentence: Therefore, I don't think success and money are the most important things in business. 

For these reasons, I don't think having success and money is the most important thing in business.

Obviously, I'd write sad songs or complaints. It would be so amazing to be rich thanks to my opinions about the world and men. Coming back to my original question, I think one method for not thinking about someone could be writing in English. In this way I can keep being stupid because I know that I should give time or space to someone who doesn't know that I exist, but, at the same time, I can practice my English ( but I reject the idea of publishing a book or songs about my "teenage breakdown"). I don't like feeling so weak, and I am so practical with my friends about "teenager questions" ("Sara, why should I stop texting him?" "Because you know that he doesn't care about you"). It is so easy when it's about other people. I am the queen of the advice, but when it's about me I turn into the weakest girl in the world at 15 years old over the first date. I hate this situation and I think when I start writing, like I am now, it is so helpful. I don't know why. Writing lets my brain breathe. When I am so nervous that my head hurts, I start writing and it's like the doors of my brain open and I finally can "breathe". I was thinking that maybe another good method could be  to stop thinking so much. We can't have power over everything and sometimes we need to let go of other people, even if sometimes you need time and even if you have known this person for a long time (so it becomes a routine - writing about this person). If someone leaves, another person will come. I am just scared of the unknown. Who isn't?