JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jan 15th

I would like someone to correct my diary entry( or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be glad even if you JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please?

JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jan 15th

Yesterday at afternoon,

Normally, just say "yesterday afternoon".  "Yesterday, in the afternoon" is also ok, but I personally just say "Yesterday Afternoon"

I had a blast day with my co-workers, talking about such a stupid topics or a serious talk like topics regarding the work.

When you say "such a stupid topic" I would also kind of expect you to tell me what the topic is first.

Like this event is often called "Nomi-kai" in Japanese. Here, it is not important for the company as before of old, but there are some whose the thought that still think which it is really important for growing their company because as if we had a are talking about various topics with alcohol again and again, we would become more friendly with each other.

You say "more friendly" or "more friendlier" if you already are friends with your co-workers.  Otherwise, "become friendly with each other" is also ok

Actually, I didn't like "Nomi-kai" since I want to go straight home straightforwardly after my work, but, I don't know when I like it though, I become notice of liking it.

I don't quite understand the last part, maybe you can tell me what you want to say in Japanese?  Also, "go straight home" sounds normal to me

With drinking, I can talk with my boss about the topic which I couldn't talk usually while working, and I think it is really fan fun for me.

fan = ファン；団扇、fun = 楽しい

Changing the topic suddenly though, there is "change in personal personnel" soon. Possibly, my boss who I respect would transfer to an another branch, or so do I. If the boss does so, it would be really sadness thing.

"it would be really sad" if you think it is going to be sad, "it would be really saddening" if you think it is going to make you sad

However, I know the business worker in Japan can't avoid this as long as we work in Japan.

Eiken writing, could you check my sentences?

Question: Read the email. Imagine that you are MIki. Write an appropriate response to Katherine. Your response should be around 100words in length.

E-mail
Hi, Miki

I hope you are well.

I read an interesting magazine article last night. It contains a survery of parents who have children in elementary school. Many of the parents said their children play indoors too much. What do you think about that?

The article also mentioned that many high school students and college students often sleep for less than six hours a night. Why do you think this is happening? It is a very small thing, but if the 2 topics are the same and it is understood that they are the same (in this case they're both "students") then you don't need to repeat the same word

By the way, my son has started taking cooking classes twice a month. Do you think it is important for young people to learn how to cook.?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Katherine
<my response="">
Hi, Katherine

I'm doing fine.  Thanks for asking.  I would personally say "Thanks for asking (how I am)" and even ask how the sender is doing themself

I think children should play mainly outdoors. This is because there are many things outdoors they can't expect. For instance, when they go to the see/experience nature like the mountains, they can encounter lots of things they can't learn indoors.</my>

<my response="">
In my opinion, nowadays, during night time, there are many things we can enjoy alone such as computer video games. In the past, comparinged to now, most students can't enjoy well don't have a lot to enjoy at night. That is why, the sleeping time of students is under six hours.</my>

"Computer Games" isn't used very often, more commonly we say "Video Games"

<my response="">
Yes, I agree with your idea. think that it is important for young people to learn how to cook.  When they become adults, they need to cook by themselves. Additionally, I think delicious food make one's life happy.
</my>

In Katherine's mail, she was asking Miki what her opinion is.  In this case, she didn't present an idea, but a question, so it sounds weird to say "I agree with your idea" even if the English itself is correct.

<my response="">
How about your opinion?

Miki.</my>

If you could cry on anyone's shoulder,whose would it be?

I would cry on my mother's shoulder.
My mother is very kind.We often go shopping, go eating out, we are on in very good terms.
So I say tell to my mother everything.
Now, I live by myself, but I talk to her by cellphone.
However,we often quarrel over trifles.
The next day I will make up with her immediately!

Cleaned windows in a sunndy day

I cleaned the living room and the windows in the morning today. I liked wiping the windows outside because it was clear sky the sky was clear or the weather was clear. Every year, I suffer from pollution pollen* allergy of one sort of trees which flies(appears?, i dont know how to express) between January to March at least. Lots of people has have pollution pollen allergy in Japan and people tend to start wearing a face mask because of that in Spring.

*花粉症と言いたいなら、"Pollen Allergy" と言えるよ :)

例：Every year I suffer from (a kind of) pollen allergy, at least between January to March.

Where would you like to visit the most?

I would most like to visit Taiwan.I have ever been to there once. Or "I have only been there once"
That time,I spent had a very wonderful time.
My Taiwanese friends introduced me to many famous places, and we went to eat Taiwanese food together.
Also,we We also took many pictures.These are my important treasures.
But when I went to Taiwan,I'm not good at speaking Chinese,so I couldn't talk them in Chinese. Instead of "But", try to use "However," instead :)
When I next go, Next time before I go, I will study Chinese very hard,.  I want to talk them in Chinese!

加油！

頑張ってね！私も日本語で喋りたいなぁと思って :)

New Year's Holidays in Amamioshima Island

I went Amami island with my family during New Year's holiday.
This island is located the 4th southern-most in Kagoshima, almost Okinawa.

Or, "This is the 4th southern-most island in Kagoshima, almost/pretty close to Okinawa"

After I arrived in Amami airport, I was surprised that it was warmer than my city (or hometown) Kumamoto. The weather in the island is similar to Okinawa island, but less well-known tourist site than (or compared to) Okinawa.
I also found many plants were different from ones in Kyushu main island.
While I was heading to my hotel, I wanted to take some pictures in which I stood in front of sugarcane fields.
However, my hotel's driver advised me " There are dangerous snakes in the sugarcane field. Don't step in the fields." You don't need to repeat it :)
I gave up to take sugercane's pictures. (or continue from the last sentence and add "so I gave up on trying to take pictures") The snake is called "habu" in Japanese.
People in Amami island make some products from these snakes (or "this type of snake"). One of them is a lucky charm. The lucky charms are made from the habu's skin. Habu lucky charms are believed to that they can bring us happiness. My husband bought one from a souvenir shop. I hope his wishes come true.
By the way, I looked up "habu" on the internet. Habu is "Protobothrops flavoviridis" in English (actually, it's more like a "Scientific Name", I highly doubt any English speaker would try and call it by that name :). I can't memorize such a long name, so I wrote the Japanese name "habu."
We had wonderful days ("a wonderful time" sounds more natural) in Amami. I will write more about our trip next time.

Would you mind correcting my writing? Thank you for taking your time.

[ January 10 .2018 ]

Thank you for a lot of messages.

I am so happy!

I will keep on studying English!とか

I will do my best in studying Englishというとか。頑張ってね :)

Let's enjoy conversation with me .これはちょっとおかしい。"Let's enjoy having a conversation"と言われていいだと思います。

This picture is the "sushi" which I ate earlier.

It was delicious.

Let's try it If you come to Japan.

xoxo