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Eiken writing, could you check my sentences?
Question: Read the email. Imagine that you are MIki. Write an appropriate response to Katherine. Your response should be around 100words in length.Hi, Miki
I hope you are well.
I read an interesting magazine article last night. It contains a survery of parents who have children in elementary school. Many of the parents said their children play indoors too much. What do you think about that?
The article also mentioned that many high school students and college students often sleep for less than six hours a night. Why do you think this is happening? It is a very small thing, but if the 2 topics are the same and it is understood that they are the same (in this case they're both "students") then you don't need to repeat the same word
By the way, my son has started taking cooking classes twice a month. Do you think it is important for young people to learn how to cook.?
I look forward to hearing from you.
Katherine
Hi, Katherine
I'm doing fine. Thanks for asking. I would personally say "Thanks for asking (how I am)" and even ask how the sender is doing themself
I think children should play mainly outdoors. This is because there are many things outdoors they can't expect. For instance, when they go to the see/experience nature like the mountains, they can encounter lots of things they can't learn indoors.
In my opinion, nowadays, during night time, there are many things we can enjoy alone such as computer video games. In the past, comparinged to now, most students can't enjoy well don't have a lot to enjoy at night. That is why, the sleeping time of students is under six hours.
"Computer Games" isn't used very often, more commonly we say "Video Games"
Yes, I agree with your idea. think that it is important for young people to learn how to cook. When they become adults, they need to cook by themselves. Additionally, I think delicious food make one's life happy.
In Katherine's mail, she was asking Miki what her opinion is. In this case, she didn't present an idea, but a question, so it sounds weird to say "I agree with your idea" even if the English itself is correct.
How about your opinion?
Miki.
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