My italki profile Hi everyone, my name is Sam, I live in Shenzhen China witch is a vibrant city with many companies of electronic, technology and internet.I like play guitar, photography and cycling.I'm learning English and coding,my goal on italki is can talk with nature speaker smoothly.I very glad to be your language partner if you are learning mandarin and cantonese,please don't hesitate s to sent me message. Above is I'm going to field in my italki profile,but I feel it is verbose not simple,I don't know how to revise this and what should I do,would you like to give me some suggestions?

We live in same city but not the same life Today I came back home in 17:30 PM, I usually came back home after 20:00 PM.and than I saw a scene that I never seen, I saw a lot of children and mother on the playground, childrens are all playing happy, smile on their face. A gril is studying ride bike, and her brother is heping her catch the bike tail.I remenber my children time, and suddenly miss my sister so much! Usually I can only see lights and stars when on the road of came back home, and today's scene make me feel a little sad, I am just the guy fight in the big city, not really belong here.But I still so happy because the children's smile make me feel sweet, I feel happyness. I don't know if the english speaker can understan these words, I am practice English,this is my first composition in italki, feel terrible.