We live in same city but not the same life
Today I came back home in 17:30 PM, I usually came back home after 20:00 PM.and than I saw a scene that I never seen, I saw a lot of children and mother on the playground, childrens are all playing happy, smile on their face. A gril is studying ride bike, and her brother is heping her catch the bike tail.I remenber my children time, and suddenly miss my sister so much!
Usually I can only see lights and stars when on the road of came back home, and today's scene make me feel a little sad, I am just the guy fight in the big city, not really belong here.But I still so happy because the children's smile make me feel sweet, I feel happyness.
I don't know if the english speaker can understan these words, I am practice English,this is my first composition in italki, feel terrible.
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We live in the same city but not the same life
Today I came back home at 17:30 PM. I usually come back home after 20:00 PM but this time I saw a scene that I had never seen before. I saw a lot of children and a mother in the playground. The children were all playing happily, smiles on their face. A girl is learning to ride a bike, and her brother is helping her by holding the bike's tail.I remembered my childhood, and I suddenly missed my sister so much!Usually, I can only see lights and stars when on the road of came back home but today's scene makes me feel a little sad, I am just a guy fighting in the big city, not really belonging here.But I'm still so happy because the childrens' smiles made me feel sweet, I feel happiness.
I don't know if the English speaker can understand these words, I am practicing English, this is my first composition in italki, feel terrible.
Hi Sam, don't feel terrible. That was good, I understood everything. Just be careful with some little grammar mistakes.
Hope this helps.
Nicholas
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We live in same city but not the same life
Today I came back home in at 17:30 PM, while I usually came come back home after 20:00 PM. (If we use PM and AM we do not use the 24 hour clock, but the 12 hour clock which indicates ante meridiem (AM) and post meridiem (PM), meaning before midday and after midday.)and Then I saw a scene that I had never seen before - I saw a lot of children and a mother on the playground. The childrens are were all happy playing happy, with smiles on their faces. A gril girl is studying was learning how to ride a bike, and her brother is was helping her by catch holding the bike tail. I remembered my children time childhood, and suddenly I missed my sister so much!
Usually I can only see the lights and the stars when on the road of came back home, and today's scene make made me feel a little sad. I am just the a guy fighting in the a big city, and I do not really belong here. But, I was still so happy because the children's smiles make made me feel sweet, I feel happiness.
I don't know if the an English speaker can understand these words. I am practice English and this is my first composition on italki, so I feel terrible.
Good job, Sam, you are off to a good start! Just keep writing and learning, and you will make great progress.
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