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I’m Tired
From Since yesterday to this day, I have sleep slept for around about fifteen hours, now I’m still so tired to do this [1]. For me, regularly, every month there would be several days when I felt would get really tired in a month. I think my energy is limited even if I am young, so if I overdraft my energy before overexert, I it would oblige me need to sleep more some in the following days after. I tried try my best to go through it and made as well as make preparations for the following days after [2]. I watched some movies to relax myself, moreover, I didn’t avoid thinking about my study and my life, just like taking a holiday. I hope that I can go back and go on fighting tomorrow.---
[1] "to do this"?
[2] It's fine to use "following days" here, but since I've used it in the sentence prior we should use another phrase to avoid repetition.
There was a lot of corrections in this one but that's not necessarily because your writing was incorrect, I just rephrased statements to make it sound more natural :)
Nice work! Nothing wrong with taking a few days out to recharge every month, it's probably inadvertently a really good thing for you.
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0 votedMarch 29, 20161Investing in Stocks
Today I was so happy because my stocks had risen. Actually, these days I still lose money even if I have gotten some money back these days. When it comes to stocks, I have to say the elective course I chose last year to be a starting [3]. Last year, I chose stock investment/trading as my elective course and naturally, I invested my money into the stock market. At the start beginning of that time, I was so excited day and night. and I checked my stocks frequently, regardless of time or place no matter when and no matter where [1]. For example, I checked it in my bed, in the classroom, in the toilet, in the kitchen and so on. I constantly looked at my mobile phone, when my stocks went up, I smiled, jumped and ran here and there; when my stocks went down, I became sad and had no mood to do anything. However, I could can control my emotions now, I wouldn’t become sad just because of my stocks any more and I just only look over it in my free time. I think my future can’t depend on stocks investment/trading so that I have to improve myself [2].---
1. I think "no matter when or where" sounds more natural when used at the start of a sentence: "No matter when or where, always be alert."
2. What are you trying to say here? "...so I have to continue to improve myself." Or "...so I have to improve myself in other ways." Or something
3. I have no idea what you're trying to say with this sentence. Your next sentence seems to give similar information so this sentence is not needed?
Very interesting experience :) Great work!
0 votedMarch 28, 20162I got a new job.
I came to Australia two weeks ago and I got a new job yesterday.
I have a difficulty to getting used to live living in with Australian but I'm doing my best.
My job is to take care of kids so it's more but it has been difficult to understand what they their saying.*
This is the reason why I want to study English very hard.
And I will go to Brisbane city on Friday or Sunday and do to shopping and enjoy my time.---
* Are you trying to express that understanding children is harder than adults?
Your English is pretty good! Now you just need to work on making your sentences flow & sound natural. Try reading something in English that you like!
Welcome to Australia, to sunny QLD!
Study hard! Do your best :)
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0 votedMarch 23, 20162* - if you were more specific or descriptive here it would make your writing richer. For example: When I feel... down, depressed, sad, discouraged, hopeless, etc. I found this table some years ago, if you save it, it might be useful to draw upon https://www.evernote.com/shard/s193/sh/20315fac-eb91-4172-8ca3-325f8bcf997e/dabe0b4ed4f44e28
^ - try keeping your subject either singular or plural the whole way through: if "I" - then keep using I until the thought / argument is finished.
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Wow, I really love this short essay! Very insightful and interesting, well argued and written. I simply love the way you think :D
Keep writing!
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0 votedMarch 20, 20161Reciprocality
Everyone has someone who brings our potential ability out. They are the source that encourages us to be more brave. Who is that kind of person to for you? We often make resolute plans at first, but in some cases they become very vulnerable by external circumstances in reality. Every time when I cast a doubt on the practicality of my plans, I feel withdrawn and start to ponder if I should change my plans or lower my expectations expected value. Then, however, the people who emotionally support me us just appear come up and say remind me that they still believe in me, and that I can do what I want. The interesting thing is that we play the same role to each other. We sometimes don’t believe in ourselves but tell our friends, "you can do everything you want to do."
Google says: If you use single quotations marks, then you should use double quotation marks for a quote within a quote. If you use double quotation marks, then you should use single quotation marks for a quote within a quote. For example: "When I say 'immediately,' I mean some time before August," said the manager.
This reciprocality has an enormous impact on our lives because that’s one of the reasons that why we continue to keep up with pursue our dreams instead of giving up so easily. When I feel so really bad*, I try to think about the people I’ve met in my life. Some relationships look very seem inevitable and while others are not I still don't understood- understand how I we came to meet them and become friends befriends with them. Any Regardless of the kind of relationships they are, it is very obvious that we affect each other however insignificant our behaviors interactions are. At first, we might not realize how influential we are to each other, yet some years later or perhaps after we go through some experiences occasions, we sometimes find out that our decisions would have been different if I we hadn’t met the people I’ve we've met^.---
I'll leave some more feedback and thoughts in a follow up post.
0 votedMarch 20, 20160
