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Please check these sentences!
Hi there. The sentences below are for the an official paper. I'm I'd be glad if you checked whether these words or phrases are appropriate as an for academic English.
After graduation, I hope to be engaged in products development section in the a multinational company headquartered in Japan, and introduce the user innovation which has a possibility has the potential to change the way of Japanese creating and manufacturing.
I am not sure what you mean by 'creating'. I think it would be best if you either did not use the word 'creating' at all. Or maybe used 'innovation' instead!There are some companies which are proud of take pride in their way of manufacturing, but scarcely reflect meet their customer's demands to for their products.
To change this situation, I am going to learn study marketing from both theoretical and analytical aspects at the University of ○○, such as collecting quantitative and qualitative data to analyze the consumer's ongoing needs.
I am sure that I can contribute to improve the improvement of existing products as well as the development of new products, and make them more competitive as a market researcher to compete in today's challenging market by making the best use of my past experiences and learning achievements.
I am sure is a bit of a weak word - it does not sound convincing enough. I suggest to use 'I am certain' or 'I can say with confidence'.
I also added the word 'today's' to the phrase 'challenging market' as it seemed a bit too ambiguous without a descriptor.Overall, this is a strong piece of formal writing, I'm impressed! Well done!
0 votedFebruary 17, 20171Shoes for walking.
I go to my office to walk about 30 minutes every day.
If you want to say that you walk to your office, you should say 'I go to my office by foot'.
'By foot' literally means '足を使って', therefore it means '歩いて行く'.I bought my shoes last summer and It have damaged.
They have become damaged.I would like to know what shoes would be more comfortable for me.
Instead of 'what', say 'what kind of shoes'.If you have a big knowledge for walking shoes, please let me know. Thank you.
Instead of 'if you have big knowledge', say 'if you know a lot about shoes'!Well done!
0 votedFebruary 17, 20171Haru Ichiban
"Haru Ichiban" has come today.
"Haru" is spring and "Ichiban" is first in Japanese.
It's the first warm, strong wind around the end of winter.Place commas if using more than one adjective.
When "Haru Ichiban" has come, we are able to know that spring is just around the corner.'We are able to know' is technically correct, but just 'we know' on its own sounds more natural!
Also, nice use of 'just around the corner'! :^)
Since I hate winter, I'm happy that the best season will come soon.This is correct, but perhaps 'I'm happy that my favourite season is coming' would sound a bit more natural too.
I love cherry blossoms trees and comfortable weather.
However, for people who have hay fever, the worst season will come!Well done, keep up the good work! c:
0 votedFebruary 17, 20171It is very useful to improve your language skills that try to write some thing. by writing.
I have been learning English for a while, but I think I just got a little made just a little progress. so I try I'm trying to figure out why, and trying to find a way which more useful for to improve my English skills, then I realized writing some thing something down using your own sentences is really helpful for improving to improve my English.
In this place, italki, it is very interesting to write down something that you can write something down and then a lot of people give you different corrections. And you can read the composition those other people have written in your native language, so you can find out how the people express the things using your native language and you can correct it. I think that is very interesting.0 votedOctober 23, 20161My english is very bad.)
Good at times.
My name is Anny. I have a big and funny family. We are learning new languages. My mother is studying French, my father is studying Esperanto, first younger sister - Germany, second younger sister - Korean, and I'm learning English ( and Japanese but.....tsss))) My parents are very good people.0 votedJanuary 18, 20160
