An important chapter of my life story

An Important Chapter in My Life

When I was a teenager, I played football soccer 3 times a week.

Everyday that I had sports in my schedule I used to be happy,
I was happy on the days I was scheduled to play,
I was happy on the days I got to play,
but everything changed on August 14
but on August 14th everything changed. I was playing as goalkeeper when someone kicked the ball in my direction While playing goalkeeper, someone kicked the ball towards me and I turned my body to try to catch it. That was the moment when I suffered a ligament damage In that moment, I damaged a ligament in my left knee. Almost immediatly, I tried to put my patella in place immediately; some minutes after that minutes later my mother went to my picked me up from school to and take took me to the hospital. At the end of the day, I knew that I would deal with a lot of problems for some months. I knew I'd have a long recovery ahead of me.

P.S: This is my first text entry here at iTalki and my goal is writing to write 1 text entry per week. Feel free to correct me and to suggest something about my writing. provide any corrections or feedback on my writing.

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Notes: I'm sorry if it was too much, you did EXCELLENT for your first time writing here. As you become older and more proficient in English you learn how to to shorten unnecessary words while strengthening your articulation and the detail of the content. Please let me know how I can better help you or if I should go easier to help you get better. This is my first time in teaching or helping individuals get better. 
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An Important Chapter in My Life
When I was a teenager, I played soccer 3 times a week. I was happy on the days I got to play, but on August 14th everything changed. While playing goalkeeper, someone kicked the ball towards me and I turned my body to try to catch it. At that moment, I damaged a ligament in my left knee. I tried to put my patella in place immediately; minutes later my mother picked me up from school and took me to the hospital. At the end of the day, I knew I'd have a long recovery ahead of me. 

P.S. This is my first entry here at iTalki and my goal is to write 1 entry per week. Feel free to provide any corrections or feedback on my writing. 

Does this sentence make any sense?

It's adorable how excited people got by the idea of someone giving a damn about whether their lives are as good as they seem.

We can gather the context from what you might be trying to say. But... - The CONNECTION of the opinion that "It's adorable" to the CONTEXT or IDEA of "how excited people..." ---- You should use a verb to make a better connection with the two in order to explain/articulate what you're trying to say. Example: It's adorable to SEE how excited people... It's adorable to HEAR how excited people... They way I would write this out assuming you meant this in a past tense since you used the verb "got" would be... It's adorable to see how excited people got from the idea of someone giving a damn about whether their lives are as good as they seem.