Why use "in making" instead of "to make" in following sentence? We were dismayed to learn that our neighbors were untidy, disagreeable, and uninterested (in making/to make) new friends. What's the difference ?

Is this a readable sentence? Help me to rephrase it if it is bad.. Thank you! Furthermore, working in consulting companies helps me to gain precious experience of participating in a group of talented people that will permit me to recognize my weakness as well as sharpening my insights of different industries in today's complex and fast paced business world since the clients are from all walks of life.

Are these sentences correct and formal? question answered.

I'm applying scholarship. Please correct my wording(formal tone) and grammar mistakes. Thank you!!! I am submitting this application for the XXX Scholarship to further my education in International Business Management. I have studied for three years at XXX University and require financial assistance to complete my master degree in International Business management. Born and raised in a family engaging business, I have looked up my father with admiration since middle school. I’ve seen him insist on fighting for his dream. He, who managed the business from a small grocery store to a chain of hypermarkets and now have created over XXXX jobs, inspires in me the ultimate form of praise imitation. I have set ambitious goal to be an elite entrepreneur and captain the family business to the next level ever since. With this clear goal in mind, I achieved bachelor degree in 3 years and had engaged in family businesses during college. So far, I’ve experienced in 5 business practices covering retails, consulting, training & education, and hotel &motel, including one start-up business that I have currently been working on. I realized significance of education through these precious experiences and hence have decided to pursue higher education not only in broad field like management that I have decided to study at the University of XXX but also in some specified research areas like consumer experience innovation of retail industry in ACPC which I have planed to explore in the future. Receiving this fund will strengthen my competitiveness to apply research programs as well as to apply internship programs in some world leading companies. As I acquired expertise via these experiences, I could leverage the family business to the next level, and consequently, creating more jobs in China. As an independent individual, XXX scholarship allows me to progress further down my chosen career path and at the same time it alleviates my financial burden. I know that you will receive numerous application forms. I want to thank you for your time and consideration.

Is this proper English? I'm trying to translate a document from English Version into Chinese Version. I found the document that I'm working on is very weird. For example: "management meeting (I think it's uncommon but understandable) competition dynamics (didn't find the definition for this phrase on google) alignment on something... (i saw aligned/alignment of, but never "on something" ) Based on the findings of the diagnosis phase, there is now the need to define scenarios with fundamental building blocks of the new organization based on predefined criteria. ( based on...balabala.....based on ?)" I just wondering are these sentences/phrases proper English? Any help will be appreciated. Thank you soooo much!

illustrate a story or interpret a story? What I'm trying to say is that "a good picture is not just an image but also a story in form of a picture". I'm trying to rephrase it as "A good pic illustrates/interprets a story". Which word is more proper(or common?) in this sentence. Any help will be appreciated.