I'm applying scholarship. Please correct my wording(formal tone) and grammar mistakes. Thank you!!!

Born and raised in a business family, I have always looked up  admired my father with admiration since middle school. I’ve seen him insist on fighting for his dreams. He, who managed the business from a small grocery store to a chain of hypermarkets and now have created over XXXX jobs, inspires in me the ultimate form of praise imitation. I have set ambitious goal to be an elite entrepreneur and captain(carry?) the family business to the next level ever since.
With this clear goal in mind, I achieved bachelor degree in 3 years and had engaged in family businesses during college. So far, I’ve experienced in 5  different business practices covering retails, consulting, training & education, and hotel & motel, including and one start-up business that I have currently been working on. I realized significance of education through these precious experiences, and hence have decided to pursue higher education not only in broad fields like management that I have decided to study at the University of XXX but also in some specified research areas like consumer experience innovation of retail industry in ACPC which I have planed to explore in the future.  management but also specified research areas such as consumer experience innovation of the retail industry.
Receiving this fund will strengthen my competitiveness to apply to research programs as well as to apply internship programs in some world leading companies. As I acquired expertise via these experiences, I could leverage the family business to the next level, and consequently, creating more jobs in China. As an independent individual, XXX scholarship would allow me to progress further down my chosen career path and at the same time it alleviates my financial burden.
I know that you will receive numerous application forms. I want to thank you for your time and consideration.

Hope that helps! i tried to fix some mistakes without changing too much of what you wrote. 

May i give you a tip? I am currently a Business Marketing student in the United States and have received many scholarships and have also helped a lot of people write their scholarship letters. I suggest you think more about 'why'  they should give you this scholarship rather than someone else. Everyone looks up to their parents, everyone wants their own business, everyone wants money to grow and do more things, how are you different? think about these questions and really put yourself in the essay.

When i did one of my essays, i wrote about how poor my family was when we were in Vietnam. We lived in a house made of leaves that would flood whenever rain came. I wrote about how emotional it was for my family and I to leave everything an everyone to come to America. I wrote about the challenges we faced to earn money and survive. And i wrote about how I had everything to lose if i didn't succeed.

Give the reader a reason to care and remember you. Good luck friend, hope you succeed!