Formal e-mail, is there anyone that can correct it?

Dear Mr. Brown,

As the marketing director of YES-FOOD, I am writing to enquire you to know something about the possibility of organizing a meeting at your hotel.

The proposed meeting is going to be on 4th of March from 11am to around 1pm. We need a big space to accomodate our 20 american guests, so I thought to I would like to book your business room if it is available. After the meeting, we would like to offer our guests a meal that will last at least 2 hours, I thought that it is a good idea offer something to eat to my guests.  We would like to serve a lunch* in your restaurant room with different kinds of italian food (pasta, lasagna, meat, desserts, etc.) to demonstrate our italian culture and the high quality of our products. We would of course provide the food.

We are able to pay €50 per person for the use of the meeting and lunch rooms. Please let me know if this offer is acceptable to you?

If you need any further information please do not hesitate to contact me.

Yours faithfully,

CM

Notes:I am not sure if banquet is the right word here.

I think you need to specify if you just want to use the rooms or if you need extras (people to serve food, clean up, cups and plates etc).

Life in Thesis

As I say in my little presentation, I've written a thesis* I have been writing my PHD thesis in public law for five years.
Overall it's been wonderful a wonderful job because I spend time in learning, reading, and building my thoughts. I really seem to improve myself everyday days.

However, it's an activity with some negative items, there are also some disadvantages. In particular, and especially it's a very lonely job. People around 25 years old are not supposed to be closed at stuck at home everydays. My professional life is very calm and solitary. No team, no collective project etc. It's not exactly the life I had planned when I was 18 years. Sometimes, It's difficult to support because there is a kind of gap between my projects and the reality.** But it's an mandatory way However, it is necessary for me to succeed for succeeding with my thesis. I hope finish it as soon as possible while continuing to discover other interesting things like improving my english and meeting people.

*"I've written a thesis" means that it is finished, but if I understand you correctly, you are still writing it.

** <em>because there is a kind of gap beetween my projects and the reality </em> I am not sure what you mean here. Do you mean financial support (money?) or do you mean motivation ? I am also not sure if "projects" is the right word. Do you mean "goals"?

Good luck with your thesis and learning English ! :)

hello

nice to meet you!!
I'm in college, I love listening to Western music. US music My favourite musicians are Michael , Paramore , Coldplay and Fall out boy. I like Western music more mch better than jpop
and an F1 fun (I don't understand this bit).

Remember that bands and names must start with a Capital letter. :)

My Studen't Composition on the Topic of the Rich People.

Does a lot of money make people successful ? This question has always worried people and the answer to it is not simple. {a letter way of saying this is : This is a question that worries many people, mainly because its answer is not simple}

In my opinion, being rich does not necessarily mean that you are successful. First of all, if you only work for money, you will not get satisfaction from your life. What is more, while making your fortune, you may not have enough time for your family so you’re to have problems in family relationship which might cause problems in your personal life. Finally, lots of money can worsen your character because rich people are often greedy and lack of morals (grammatically this is fine but it is quite a big generalisation}.

Unfortunately, most people view success in terms of money. They believe money will bring happiness because they will be able to buy luxurious things, travel around the world and realize their dreams. In addition to that there is an opinion that some rich people remain decent and spend a lot of money on charity.

But in my opinion uou can buy houses and cars but money will not help you to buy love, friendship and good health. Secondly, the rich people (which rich people?) are not admired for their wealth the fact of having money but for the good work job they do for the society and they see their success in helping people themselves.

In conclusion, I would argue that being rich is not the only way of being successful in life. From my point of view, it is more important to have an interesting job, good friends and a happy family. Other people make you happy, not money!

(Some advice on logic and structure of the text is more than welcome)

Hi there, well done on your writing! I think you need to be careful not to generalise or repeat yourself. Maybe say something at the beginning about how success means different things to different people. Then give some examples before presenting your definition of success, and how it differs from being rich. Hope that helps! Good luck :)

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Homework~

Helping strangers used to be considered a virtue. But nowadays people tend to be very cautious of strangers. They are afraid that helping others can sometimes bring them trouble. What's your opinion?

My Trip to England.

In October 2014, I left my little island and I caught a flight to Paris. I live in Réunion Island, it's not near England. In fact, it is 11 000 km away from Paris. When i arrived in Paris, we took a coach to the north of France.For the ferry takes and before we have been in England. I was suprised since it was the first time for me, to being in England.

[Bonjour, ne oubliez pas, en Anglais les mois de l'année commencent avec une lettre majuscule. Je ne comprends pas les deux dernier phrases, si vous plait, allez-vous les ecrire a nouveux:)