My Studen't Composition on the Topic of the Rich People.

Does a lot of money make people successful ? This question has always worried people and the answer to it is not simple. {a letter way of saying this is : This is a question that worries many people, mainly because its answer is not simple}

In my opinion, being rich does not necessarily mean that you are successful. First of all, if you only work for money, you will not get satisfaction from your life. What is more, while making your fortune, you may not have enough time for your family so you’re to have problems in family relationship which might cause problems in your personal life. Finally, lots of money can worsen your character because rich people are often greedy and lack of morals (grammatically this is fine but it is quite a big generalisation}.

Unfortunately, most people view success in terms of money. They believe money will bring happiness because they will be able to buy luxurious things, travel around the world and realize their dreams. In addition to that there is an opinion that some rich people remain decent and spend a lot of money on charity.

But in my opinion uou can buy houses and cars but money will not help you to buy love, friendship and good health. Secondly, the rich people (which rich people?) are not admired for their wealth the fact of having money but for the good work job they do for the society and they see their success in helping people themselves.

In conclusion, I would argue that being rich is not the only way of being successful in life. From my point of view, it is more important to have an interesting job, good friends and a happy family. Other people make you happy, not money!

(Some advice on logic and structure of the text is more than welcome)

Hi there, well done on your writing! I think you need to be careful not to generalise or repeat yourself. Maybe say something at the beginning about how success means different things to different people. Then give some examples before presenting your definition of success, and how it differs from being rich. Hope that helps! Good luck :)

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