上星期日，我同朋友喺茶餐廳一齊食咗晏。茶餐廳喺New York嘅唐人街。我哋嗌咗兩杯凍奶茶，西多士，焗葡汁雞飯，同埋焗蕃茄汁豬扒意粉。凍奶茶好甘美（醒神）(refreshing點講呀？)同埋好甜。朋友鍾意佢嘅焗蕃茄汁豬扒意粉。西多士好食，因爲少少脆皮（塊皮有小小脆）同埋好甜(a little crispy and sweet點講呀？)。我都鍾意焗葡汁雞飯，因爲雞好鬆婄（嫩）(tender點講呀？)同埋我鍾意葡汁嘅味道。我哋食晏以後（食完晏之後），我哋都食飽，但係好（開）心。
Boston嘅唐人街冇茶餐廳，但係New York嘅塘（唐）人街有一個（use“間”would be better :D)茶餐廳。我希望Boston嘅唐人街有一個茶餐廳。美國嘅茶餐廳唔及得香港嘅茶餐廳好食，但係(有）一個茶餐廳喺Boston好過冇。
係咁先，下次見，拜拜！
Your writing is very good!
:D
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May 5, 2014
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没写了清楚(I did not write clearly.)
昨天我再（又）开始了写中文。(Yesterday I started to write Chinese again.) 很多好人尝试了批改。(Many lovely people tried to correct it. 但是我写了中文（书面汉语）比口语不好。（"Written Chinese" can translate into “书面汉语”,That would be better :D )(But my written Chinese is not as good as my spoken Chinese.) 差不多每个人（都）说的我应该也写英文。(Almost everyone said I should write English as well.) 一年多学中文还太多进步。（学习中文一年多了，我的进步不是很大）(More than a year learning Chinese and my progress isn't great.)
You already did great. :D
But need to pay more attention to the word orders.
