My First Notebook

I don't know what kind of subject you are interested in. I would like to write about something more interesting than vacations, but this is my first entry and for the moment I do not dare.

I have been in Thailand. My vacations lasted 20 days. I visited the north, the centre and the south of this amazing country.

It was a special experience, the culture is more different to mine. I learned much about Asian culture and their way of life. Nevertheless, the different áreas inside the own country have features that make them uniques unique. Some of these features that vary according to the region include religions such as Buddishm and Islam, as well as varying geography including mountains, jungle, beaches, touristic areas áreas, and markets.

I would like to tell you something I didn't know before this trip, is about something regarding the elephants. When we were researching the activities we saw many pictures on the internet that showed people enjoying riding elephants. It wasn't an activity that we thought to do because we didn't particuarly like it, but as we wanted to visited the jungle, and all the treks included the activity, we thought that maybe we would do it. It was then when we began to look into the elephants, and it was a surprise when we discovered that elephants can only carry on over their back 100 kg, and the chair weight alone is 50 kg. It was a big surprise. It was so sad to learn, we read that elephants are in many cases abused and thus we decided not to do it.

During our stay in the north, in a a city called Chiang Mai, we tried to arrange a trek in the jungle that did not include the riding of elephants. When we were ready to avoid doing this activity, fortunately, we found a trekking that did not include this activity. We made a trekking for two days and it was amazing.

In addition we found a recovery rehabilitation centre of elephants that had suffered abuse. We visited it and enjoyed feeding and washing them in a respectful enviroment.

Thank you very much for your time. Please excuse my awfull english. I promised that I would attempt to improve it.

See you!

Qué buena tu escritura. Entendí todo que escribiste. Mis correciones no cambian el significado de la escritura, pero simplemente la hacen un traduccion más natural, como lo que un nativo escribiría

A Family Meal

Today I had a family meal. There was 10 of us at home and we ate lamb. It was nice, it tasted good and was very well cooked.

I also ate salad with fruits and french fries.

I hope that my family and I have many more meals like this one in the future.

Is there a real Human Rights change?

Nowadays lifestyles are faster and more aggressive than before. In the 70's women were usually housewives where they would look after and clean the house and have dinner ready when their husbands arrived. However as women have taken on more business roles around the world alongside men, is there equality between genders?

People were asked about this topic and they said that that status of equality for women depends upon where they live, because cultural practices influence the manner in which a country thinks. For example it is possible to see differences between the status of Occidental and Oriental women. Almost all respondants said that women have had an incredible growth in rights, and at the same time have been eager to accept new obligations.

So in general, as women have demanded to have an important role in this globalized world, we shouldn't forget that everybody must have the same opportunities, irregadless of their gender, culture, nationality or skin color.

Thank you for you support ;)

Comments:

Not bad.

In general you got your point accross but be careful with subject pronouns.

The problem was that you refered to women (plural of woman) and people (plural form of one person) in your writing. You then proceed to use the pronoun 'they', however the way in which you used the term 'they' meant that in some cases it was not clear whether the term was refering to the women in general, or the the people who were the respondants to the survey you write about.

Also you used the word 'genre' when you should have used 'gender'.

Keep it up.