university study programs

Write about the following topic:
Everybody should be allowed admission to university study programs1 regardless o f
their level o f academic ability.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your
answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

UNIVERSITY STUDY PROGRAMS

It is known that university study programs plays a significant role in human life. The number of people who give importance to this number of people who give iimportance to this subject has increased in recent years. Although some people do not agree with this opinion, there are even though many things to say about it. There are several reasons for this, including self-development and contributing to the development of the country.

There are different kinds of university programs. There are programs that suit_different goals and abilities. This is so humans [I don't know what you want to say here]. Everyone has different goals and abilities. People can choose a field to that will be targeted at the university [what do you mean "targeted"?]. First of all, searching for new information is so important. People can make new discoveries here.
Another important reason is to contribute to the development of the country. People can open their own company without studying at the university [I think this is what you want to say...maybe you should choose different words]. Thus they can contribute both to their own economy and their country's economy. However, everybody in the my country doesn't benefit from this program. There is a test system. If we succeed , we can go to university study programs. Most people do not follow their dream in this case and perhaps they are working in jobs unwillingly.

In summation, taking all the explanations which are given above into consideration, it can be concluded that everybody wants to study in the university. In my opinion, İf everybody is born equal, they should have equal opportunities to choose the right to choose of university programs on equel conditions.

Keep up the good work! I can tell you're working hard, and if you keep it up you will do well on your exam in January :)

How can I make these statements natural?

The amount of police negligence is one of the factors influencing the crime rate in our city.
His upbringing from his childhood shaped him to be the cruel, cold-hearted person he's known as today.
Students who don't learn from their mistakes will later cause them to make bigger [editor's note: "huger" n'est pas un mot en anglais] ones later.
The refusal to correct and learn from our mistakes can cause those little mistakes to compound until they reach the point of being unmanageable.
After that incident, I slowly descended into a state of hopelessness.

[editor's note: Tu fais très bien! Continue l'amélioration et tu parleras comme un natif dans aucun temps :) ]

Women are better parents than men? IESTL essay practice

Raising children has always been considered as the duty of women. That is why the idea that women are better parents exists in people’s minds, and it is actually true everywhere in the world. In the last few decades, things have improved over time thanks to the modernization of couples’ ways of life. But things seem to remain the same: Women are better parents than men.

Basically, a good parent must take care of his or her children constantly and responsibly. To do so, he or she should provide them with all the required material things, like: a place to live, food, hygiene, health etc. Besides that, a good parent has to provide an appropriate education.
Even if the definition of the best education is quite controversial, a good parent should try to teach his or her children how to adapt themselves to the social world.
Finally a good parent needs to understand them and adapt his or her education accordingly. From my point of view, it is the key point to being a good parent.

But women and men have unequal roles toward the children's education. As women are in general more sensitive, they tend to be more comprehensive [editor's note: I am not sure what you mean by "comprehensive."]. That allows them to further adapt their behaviour to the personality of their gender. Furthermore women are more implicated [editor's note: I am not sure what you mean by "implicated."] for many reasons; for example they have this special link that was developed during their pregnancy; there is also the social influence, which constantly challenges or blames them.

However, in the last few years, men have become more and more implicated [?] in the children’s education. This phenomenon is due to the modernization of the society, which leads couples to share a lot of household tasks, but even so women remain better parents.

It is quietly common to think that women are better parents than men. It is most often the case because women are more sensitive and comprehensive [?]. This makes them more aware of children's needs. Thanks to the modernization of couples, men tend to improve themselves but women still remain better in that field.

[editor's note: Maintiens le travail dur! Vous faites très bien :) ]